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The widespread of the internet has given people access to information on a level never experienced before? hoe this increase in the availability of information influenced life in today's world? v.2

The widespread of the internet has given people access to information on a level never experienced before? hoe this increase in the availability of information influenced life in today's world? v. 2
Since the beginning of the current century, world has seen lots of technological inventions, such as the internet. Some people believe that the internet does not make a big difference in people’s lives; However, there is a substantial body of evidence that casts doubts in this belief. From a personal perspective, the internet opens the door to a wealth of information that has changed people’s lives drastically, given that it has positive impact on many life’s aspects; such as communication, transportation, and education. The first and foremost point, implementing the usage of the internet in schools improves the learning process. A vivid example can be given to shed light on what was elaborated above is nowadays all the schools in North America use the internet in their learning system, which incredibly maximize the potential learning outcomes. Provided that students use the internet while studying, they will have a great accessibility to different sorts of information; moreover, students can take online courses, which are cost-effective. Consequently, the internet has crucial benefits on education. Next, couple with education’s improvement, transportation is another benefit of the internet. Nowadays, using the internet simplify people’s lives. Provided that people use the data connection ability, such as, GPS to navigate their destination, they can get where they need to go. Furthermore, people can use the phone Apps, such as Google Maps to know the traffic condition, and find the best routes; so, they can save time and gas. A recent survey that conducted by The University of Toronto found the internet has reduced the commute time drastically, which improves people’s quality of life. Therefore, the internet today is fundamental for people’s lives. Although the previous benefits of the internet are the first ones which cross the mind at a glance, they are not the only available advantages. There is another subtle point that must be born in mind. The internet has improved the communication between people all over the world. To put it in another way, the internet has transferred the world into a global village. By using the internet people can access the phones’ Apps, such as WhatsApp and Viber, to communicate with other people at any place in the world. In addition to that, all people who access the web have social media accounts, either on Facebook, Twitter, or Instagram. They can communicate with other through means of likes, comments, or sharing. As a result, internet communication has made sure to contact people from two sides of the earth with no problem at all. Taking everything into consideration; without a doubt, internet provide people with vast amount of information, which makes people’s lives easier than before. It is suggested that research and technology continue in order to develop and progress.
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century,
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has
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seen
lots of technological inventions, such as the internet.
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people
believe that the internet does not
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make
a
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big
difference in
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people’s
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lives
;
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, there is a substantial body of evidence that casts doubts in this belief. From a personal perspective, the internet opens the door to a wealth of information that has
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changed
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people’s
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lives
drastically
,
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given
that it has
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positive
impact on
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many
life’s aspects; such as communication, transportation, and education.

The
first
and foremost point, implementing the usage of the internet in schools
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improves
the learning process. A vivid example can be
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given
to shed light on what
was elaborated
above is nowadays all the schools in North America
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use
the internet in their learning system, which
incredibly
maximize the potential learning outcomes. Provided that students
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use
the internet while studying, they will have a great accessibility to
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different
sorts of information;
moreover
, students can take online courses, which
are cost
-effective.
Consequently
, the internet has crucial benefits on education.

Next
, couple with education’s improvement, transportation is another benefit of the internet. Nowadays, using the internet simplify
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people’s
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lives
. Provided that
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people
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use
the data connection ability, such as, GPS to navigate their destination, they can
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get
where they need to go.
Furthermore
,
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people
can
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use
the phone Apps, such as Google Maps to know the traffic condition, and find the best routes;
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so
, they can save time and gas. A recent survey that conducted by The University of Toronto found the internet has
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reduced
the commute time
drastically
, which
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improves
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people’s
quality of life.
Therefore
, the internet
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today
is fundamental for
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people’s
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lives
.

Although the previous benefits of the internet are the
first
ones which cross the mind at a glance, they are not the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
available advantages. There is another subtle point that
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must
be born
in mind. The internet has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
the communication between
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people
all over the
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world
. To put it in another way, the internet has transferred the
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world
into a global village. By using the internet
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people
can access the phones’ Apps, such as WhatsApp and
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Viber
, to communicate with other
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people
at any place in the
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world
.
In addition
to that, all
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people
who access the web have social media accounts, either on Facebook, Twitter, or Instagram. They can communicate with other through means of likes, comments, or sharing.
As a result
, internet communication has made sure to contact
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people
from two sides of the earth with no problem at all.

Taking everything into consideration; without a doubt, internet provide
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people
with vast amount of information, which
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makes
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people’s
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lives
easier than
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before
. It
is suggested
that research and technology continue in order to develop and progress.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay The widespread of the internet has given people access to information on a level never experienced before? hoe this increase in the availability of information influenced life in today's world? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
456 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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