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the way people dresses is a good indication of her or his personality or character. do you agree or not? v.1

the way people dresses is a good indication of her or his personality or character. do you agree or not? v. 1
It is often discussed that the government should be held responsible to clean and keep up tidy areas for everyone, whereas others believe residents should be the ones taking care of their own spaces. In this essay, I will discuss that both the residents and the governments must be responsible for a cleaner environment. One of the main reasons to have individuals clean up their spaces, is that small contributions add up to everybody's benefit. In addition to this, residents can show how to treat others with respect by just having to make little to no effort. For instance, taking out the trash on the days the trucks are scheduled, is an act of great importance to a community. Though not everyone acts this way, it is the majority of the people that play by the rules. Alternatively, governments have the responsibility to make good use of the people's money. A government should always look for the well being of its citizens, hence the importance of overseeing contracts and making sure that obligations are met. For example, governments should raise awareness through campaigns, in which individuals are called to action in the form of tax incentives for those residents, who are actively engaged with a greener environment. In conclusion, everyone's contributions count towards a better, cleaner environment. I am of the opinion that the government should act as the authority, while every individual contributor must act responsibly or face the consequences when not complying with the law. Most importantly, we all need to be held accountable for our own cleanliness and all have the right to be treated fairly. In this way, the benefits of having clean and tidy areas are distributed equally.
It is
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often
discussed that the
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government
should
be held
responsible to clean and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
up tidy areas for everyone, whereas others believe
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residents
should be the ones taking care of their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
spaces. In this essay, I will discuss that both the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
residents
and the
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governments
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be responsible for a cleaner environment.

One of the main reasons to have individuals clean up their spaces, is that
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small
contributions
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
add
up to everybody's benefit.
In addition
to this,
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residents
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
how to treat others with respect by
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just
having to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
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little
to no effort.
For instance
, taking out the trash on the days the trucks
are scheduled
, is an
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act
of great importance to a community. Though not everyone
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acts
this way, it is the majority of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
that play by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
.

Alternatively
,
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governments
have the responsibility to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
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good
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use
of the
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people
's money. A
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government
should always look for the
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well being
of its citizens,
hence
the importance of overseeing contracts and making sure that obligations
are met
.
For example
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
governments
should raise awareness through campaigns, in which individuals
are called
to action in the form of tax incentives for those
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
residents
, who are
actively
engaged with a greener environment.

In conclusion
, everyone's contributions count towards a better, cleaner environment. I am of the opinion that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
should
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
act
as the authority, while every individual contributor
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
act
responsibly
or face the consequences when not complying with the law. Most
importantly
, we all need to
be held
accountable for our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
cleanliness and all have the right to
be treated
fairly
. In this way, the benefits of having clean and tidy areas
are distributed
equally
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay the way people dresses is a good indication of her or his personality or character. do you agree or not? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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