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Do you agree or disagree? The way people dresses is a good indication of his or her personality or character. v.62

The way people dresses is a good indication of his or her personality or character. v. 62
Globalization can eliminate the boundaries of interaction and trade that contributes to reduce barriers to communication and commerce; However, The positive aspects of globalization are more than negative aspects of it. To begin with the prime advantages of globalization lies in the fact that it reduces the barrier of export and import goods. Therefore, developing countries do not need to pay tax to developed countries. furthermore, international companies low to other countries exchange products and services and they can improve the country’s economy. Secondly, globalization increases different businesses all over the world and establish new job opportunities. For instance, local businesses do not offer as a broad range of products as bigger businesses do. Moreover, workers can find as easy as possible find a job that is related to their skills with more salary. As a result, globalization decreases the gap between poor and rich. For example, the developed countries such as the USA employed people who have a profession, but do not have a job in their countries, so it helps many jobless people. According to negative results of globalization. It can have a bad effect on environment of developing countries because rich countries use the natural resources of poor countries, so they damage environment of those countries. For instance, globalization can increase world carbon dioxide emission if the world burns its coal more quickly. Another disadvantage that is currency fluctuation is a significant effect of globalization. For example international trad busy sells products using the USA dollar, so the price of the dollar fluctuates day to day in developing countries this result in imbalanced economy and abnormal prices for goods and services. In conclusion, The advantages of the globalization that effect on the countries’ economy can reduce barriers to communication and trade, so the benefits of the globalization outweigh the disadvantages. This trend generally has brought many positive results better than the drawbacks.
Globalization can eliminate the boundaries of interaction and trade that contributes to
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reduce
barriers to communication and commerce;
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, The
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positive
aspects of globalization are more than
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negative
aspects of it.

To
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begin
with the prime advantages of globalization lies in the fact that it
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reduces
the barrier of export and import
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goods
.
Therefore
, developing
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countries
do not need to pay tax to developed
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countries
.
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furthermore
, international
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companies
low to other
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countries
exchange products and
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services and
they can
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improve
the
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country’s
economy.
Secondly
, globalization increases
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different
businesses all over the world and establish new job opportunities.
For instance
, local businesses do not offer as a broad range of products as bigger businesses do.
Moreover
, workers can find as easy as possible find a job that
is related
to their
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skills
with more salary. As a
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result
, globalization decreases the gap between poor and rich.
For example
, the developed
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countries
such as the USA employed
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people
who have a profession,
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but
do not have a job in their
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countries
,
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so
it
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helps
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many
jobless
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people
.

According to
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negative
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results
of globalization. It can have a
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bad
effect on environment of developing
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countries
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because
rich
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countries
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use
the natural resources of poor
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countries
,
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so
they damage environment of those
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countries
.
For instance
, globalization can increase world carbon dioxide emission if the world burns its coal more
quickly
. Another disadvantage
that is
currency fluctuation is a significant effect of globalization.
For example
international trad busy sells products using the USA dollar,
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so
the price of the dollar fluctuates day to day in developing
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countries
this
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result
in imbalanced economy and abnormal prices for
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goods
and services.

In conclusion
, The advantages of the globalization that effect on the
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countries’
economy can
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reduce
barriers to communication and trade,
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so
the benefits of the globalization outweigh the disadvantages. This trend
generally
has brought
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many
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positive
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results
better than the drawbacks.
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IELTS essay The way people dresses is a good indication of his or her personality or character. v. 62

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
315 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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