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The urban transport system receives more funds compared to the rural transport system? Why do you think it is so? How can it be solved. v.1

The urban transport system receives more funds compared to the rural transport system? Why do you think it is so? How can it be solved. v. 1
The transportation system in the cities are highly funded than those of the smaller towns. I believe it is as a result of the high population of the cities, also because cities contribute higher taxes, however, funding can be increased for the smaller towns through migration initiatives. In this essay, we will examine these two causes and the solution. Firstly, city residents contribute higher taxes, and they out-number local residents. As a result of the dense population in the metropolis, more taxes are collected, hence leading to a higher revenue in these areas. Also, the dense population has created a need for constant maintenance of these facilities. For example, according to the 2006 Nigerian Census, Lagos state had a population of 25million while Ogbomoso had just 250, 000 and these caused the Lagos state government a 35% increase in transport maintenance as against the 10% expended in Ogbomoso. In order to resolve this, it is advised that migration to smaller towns should be encouraged, so as to create meaningful development of these areas, consequently increasing tax revenue for government to implement road projects. Unarguably, rural migration supports growth and development and these can be encouraged through various incentives such as payment of monthly allowance to migrants, in order to encourage them to stay in such places. These is the strategy currently being adopted by Italy. Hence, an increase in local population will result in increased revenue for road projects. In conclusion, the transportation system of the cities receives a higher budget than the smaller towns because the cities are populated, and their infrastructures need to be constantly maintained. Likewise, more income is generated from the urban areas. In order to resolve this disparity, citizens should be encouraged to live in the smaller towns to ensure higher revenue from these areas. This will provide more funds for the authorities to spend on road projects.
The transportation system in the
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cities
are
highly
funded than those of the smaller
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towns
. I believe it is
as a result
of the high
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population
of the
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cities
,
also
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because
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cities
contribute higher
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taxes
,
however
, funding can
be increased
for the smaller
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towns
through migration initiatives. In this essay, we will examine these two causes and the solution.

Firstly
, city residents contribute higher
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taxes
, and they out-number local residents.
As a result
of the dense
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population
in the metropolis, more
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taxes
are collected
,
hence
leading to a higher
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revenue
in these
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areas
.
Also
, the dense
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population
has created a need for constant maintenance of these facilities.
For example
, according to the 2006 Nigerian Census, Lagos state had a
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population
of 25million while
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Ogbomoso
had
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just
250, 000 and these caused the Lagos state
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government
a 35% increase in transport maintenance as against the 10% expended in
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Ogbomoso
.

In order to resolve this, it
is advised
that migration to smaller
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towns
should
be encouraged
,
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so as to
create meaningful development of these
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areas
,
consequently
increasing
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tax
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revenue
for
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government
to implement road projects.
Unarguably
, rural migration supports growth and development and these can
be encouraged
through various incentives such as payment of monthly allowance to migrants, in order to encourage them to stay in such places.
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These is
the strategy
currently
being adopted
by Italy.
Hence
, an increase in local
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population
will result in increased
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revenue
for road projects.

In conclusion
, the transportation system of the
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cities
receives a higher budget than the smaller
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towns
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because
the
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cities
are populated
, and their infrastructures need to be
constantly
maintained.
Likewise
, more income
is generated
from the urban
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areas
. In order to resolve this disparity, citizens should
be encouraged
to
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live
in the smaller
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
towns
to ensure higher
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revenue
from these
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areas
. This will provide more funds for the authorities to spend on road projects.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay The urban transport system receives more funds compared to the rural transport system? Why do you think it is so? How can it be solved. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
313 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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