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Question Some people think that strict punishment for driving offences are key to reducing traffic accident. Others however believe that other measures would improve road safety. Discuss both views and give your opinion v.1

Question Some people think that strict punishment for driving offences are key to reducing traffic accident. Others however believe that other measures would improve road safety. 1
Although, The rise and fall to traffic accidents is said to be dependent on compliance and non-compliance to traffic rules and regulations. Some proponents believe that strict penalties for driving offences will reduce traffic accidents. However, Others believe that other measures especially from government will go a long way in keeping people safe. Both arguments have valid points and I will discuss them now. on the one hand, every rebellion to the existing traffic rules attracts penalty. For instance failure to wear the seatbelt while driving attracts fine of 10000 Naira in Nigeria. In addition, speeding above the recommended speed limit on that particular road is dangerous for the driver and populace in that environment. Disobedience to this law attracts financial penalty or outright ban from driving for one year. Lastly, failure to recognise hazards on the roads can as well result in road traffic accidents. Therefore, it is highly imperative for the driver to take note of this or pay for the consequences. on the other hand, government should do the needful to ensure road safety. At first, traffic rules and regulations should be included in our secondary school curriculum. This is to educate the young ones early about the laws of driving and consequences that follow suit. Additionally, government should ensure adequate construction and maintenance of road because bad road is one of the contributing factor to road traffic accidents. Lastly, it is the responsibility of the government to install speed cameras on the road in order to register any violator. Reports have it for example that developed countries have low record of road traffic accidents, unlike developing nations that have high record. This is due to absence of speed cameras on the road in the third world countries. In conclusion, in my opinion, i think strict punishment to traffic offenders is not enough, government should also ensure other factors that contribute to traffic accident are taken care of.
Although, The rise and fall to
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traffic
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accidents
is said
to be dependent on compliance and non-compliance to
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traffic
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rules
and regulations.
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Some
proponents believe that strict penalties for
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driving
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offences
will
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reduce
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traffic
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accidents
.
However
, Others believe that
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other
measures
especially
from
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government
will go a long way in keeping
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people
safe. Both arguments have valid points and I will discuss them
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now
.

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on
the one hand, every rebellion to the existing
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traffic
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rules
attracts penalty.
For instance
failure to wear the seatbelt while
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driving
attracts fine of 10000
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Naira
in Nigeria.
In addition
, speeding above the recommended speed limit on that particular
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road
is
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dangerous
for the driver and populace in that environment. Disobedience to this law attracts financial penalty or outright ban from
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driving
for one year.
Lastly
, failure to
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recognise
hazards on the
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roads
can
as well
result in
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road
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traffic
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accidents
.
Therefore
, it is
highly
imperative for the driver to take note of this or pay for the consequences.

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on
the
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other
hand,
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government
should do the needful to ensure
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road
safety. At
first
,
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traffic
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rules
and regulations should
be included
in our secondary school curriculum. This is to educate the young ones early about the laws of
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driving
and consequences that follow suit.
Additionally
,
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government
should ensure adequate construction and maintenance of
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road
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because
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bad
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road
is one of the contributing factor to
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road
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traffic
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accidents
.
Lastly
, it is the responsibility of the
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government
to install speed cameras on the
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road
in order to register any violator. Reports have it
for example
that
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developed countries
have low record of
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road
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traffic
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accidents
, unlike developing nations that have high record. This is due to absence of speed cameras on the
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road
in the third world countries.

In conclusion
, in my opinion,
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i
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think
strict punishment to
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traffic
offenders is not
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enough
,
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government
should
also
ensure
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other
factors that contribute to
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traffic
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accident
are taken
care of.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Question Some people think that strict punishment for driving offences are key to reducing traffic accident. Others however believe that other measures would improve road safety. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
321 words
6
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