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The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant v.1

The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010.
We all met tough moments when we need some advance, some different point of view. Who we will ask for the help this moment, young or elderly person and whose opinion will be more preferable? Let's check this out. On the one hand, an older man has an experience of the ages that possibly could be matched to your particular situation. At the same time, elderly people are more tolerant to mistakes we all did and, in general, do not blame for it. What is more, it is always fun to talk with a retired one to know what the life was looking like in the distant days. The history is a cycle, and situations could be repeated with a little difference. It could be handled for analysing and making a decision according to your life situation. On the other hand, if you ask an opinion from young people, you will probably get contemporary information that would work on the second we live in. Time is changing, new features come into the life and only young people could know them. Beside that, youngsters have the energy we all wish to have, so we can get not only an answer to our question, but the power to make our wishes come true. Even more, youthful people have a lot of ideas that could be possibly much better than your own. To put it all in the shell, In general, I rather ask an advice younger guy. It's much more easier for me to communicate and understand the position of youth people.
We all met tough moments when we need
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some
advance,
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some
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different
point of view. Who we will
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ask for
the
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help
this moment, young or elderly person and whose opinion will be more preferable?
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Let
's
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check
this out.

On the one hand, an older
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man
has an experience of the ages that
possibly
could
be matched
to your particular situation. At the same time, elderly
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people
are more tolerant to mistakes we all did and,
in general
, do not blame for it.
What is more
, it is always fun to talk with a retired one to know what the life was looking like in the distant days. The history is a cycle, and situations could
be repeated
with a
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little
difference. It could
be handled
for
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analysing
and making a decision according to your life situation.

On the other hand
, if you ask an opinion from young
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people
, you will
probably
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get
contemporary information that would work on the second we
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live
in. Time is changing, new features
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come
into the life and
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only
young
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people
could know them. Beside that, youngsters have the energy we all wish to have,
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so
we can
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get
not
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only
an answer to our question,
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but
the power to
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make
our wishes
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come
true. Even more, youthful
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people
have
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a lot of
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ideas
that could be
possibly
much better than your
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own
.

To put it all in the shell,
In general
, I
rather
ask an advice younger guy. It's much
Use only "easier" (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
more easier
for me to communicate and understand the position of youth
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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