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The tradition that the family gets together to eat meals is disappearing. What are the reasons? What are the impacts? v.2

The tradition that the family gets together to eat meals is disappearing. What are the reasons? What are the impacts? v. 2
It is certainly true that mealtime with family is disappearing. This essay will put forward some explanations for this trend and an analysis of the impacts. Firstly, because of the busy working schedule, people cannot find time to enjoy a meal with their families. Cooking takes a long time; therefore, instead of eating at home with their family, they eat at the restaurant to save time. For example, I often get up late, so I cannot eat with my family, I choose to eat fast food to save time. Secondly, nowadays, for those who do not know how to cook, eating at a restaurant is more convenient and delicious. Food culture is becoming more diverse, and it attracts people. Thus, there is a tendency for people to like eating at restaurants instead of eating together at home. However, this problem has both positive and negative impacts on people. On the one hand, It is important for a family to bond with family members. If people do not eat together, they could not talk and share about difficulties at work and in life. Therefore, close-knit family is disappearing. Besides, quality time with families help children to shape their personalities during the formative years. For example, in my family, the meals we share together are so few, I even cannot show my parents about my academic achievements. On the other hand, eating at the restaurant can save time. Instead of spending a lot of time to cook, they can take a break or use time for other things. In conclusion, in order to have a close-knit family, people should often eat together, talk and share about life. It not only helps people bond with family members, but also helps them de-stress after a long day.
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true that mealtime with
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family
is disappearing. This essay will put forward
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some
explanations for this trend and an analysis of the impacts.

Firstly
,
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because
of the busy working schedule,
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people
cannot find
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time
to enjoy a meal with their
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families
. Cooking takes a long
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time
;
therefore
,
instead
of
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eating
at home with their
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family
, they
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eat
at the
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restaurant
to save
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time
.
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often
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get
up late,
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so
I cannot
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eat
with my
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family
, I choose to
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eat
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fast
food to save
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time
.
Secondly
, nowadays, for those who do not know how to cook,
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eating
at a
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restaurant
is more convenient and delicious. Food culture is becoming more diverse, and it attracts
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people
.
Thus
, there is a tendency for
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people
to like
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eating
at
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restaurants
instead
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eating
together at home.

However
, this problem has both
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positive
and
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negative
impacts on
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people
. On the one hand, It is
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important
for a
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family
to bond with
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family
members. If
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people
do not
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eat
together, they could not talk and share about difficulties at work and in life.
Therefore
, close-knit
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family
is disappearing.
Besides
, quality
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time
with
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families
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help
children to shape their personalities during the formative years.
For example
, in my
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family
, the meals we share together are
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so
few, I even cannot
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show
my parents about my academic achievements.
On the other hand
,
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eating
at the
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restaurant
can save
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time
.
Instead
of spending
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a lot of
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time
to cook, they can take a break or
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use
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time
for other things.

In conclusion
, in order to have a close-knit
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family
,
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people
should
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often
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eat
together, talk and share about life. It not
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only
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helps
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people
bond with
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family
members,
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but
also
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helps
them de-
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stress
after a long day.
18Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
40Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay The tradition that the family gets together to eat meals is disappearing. What are the reasons? What are the impacts? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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