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The tradition that family gets together to eat meals is disappearing. What are the reasons? What are the impacts on families and societies? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.5

The tradition that family gets together to eat meals is disappearing. What are the reasons? What are the impacts on families and societies? v. 5
It is true that modern families do not have meals together as often as in the past. Reasons for this vary, and there are several impacts on both households and the community as a whole. Family members today rarely eat meals together because of several causes. The hectic work schedule is often considered the main reason why individuals now tend to resort to prepared meals to save time for work. As such, the tradition that parents came back from work to cook lunch for children is no longer preferable in many countries, and this also explains why the fast food industry is developing fast in this country. Another contributing factor is that culinary skills are no longer passed on to younger generations. Food outlets and restaurants today offer a wide range of food choices that can satisfy even fussy eaters, meaning that cooking is not necessarily a skill that young people need to learn to cook for the family. The gradual disappearance of family meals has several effects. Firstly, having meals with family members is a great chance for them to bond with each other, so parents have less time to talk with their children, and spouses also lose an opportunity to share daily stories. On the social level, some traditions may be lost as a result of people eating out too often. Family values might not be appreciated when people do not feel the need to come back home after work for a meal. On special occasions such as New Year Eve, family feasts serve as an important event, and it is regretful that this tradition is gradually disappearing. In conclusion, various factors are attributable to the disappearance of family meals. This has several damaging effects on both families and societies.
It is true that modern
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families
do not have
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together as
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often
as in the past. Reasons for this vary, and there are several impacts on both households and the community as a whole.

Family members
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today
rarely eat
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meals
together
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because
of several causes. The hectic
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work
schedule is
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often
considered the main reason why individuals
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now
tend to resort to prepared
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meals
to save time for
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work
. As such, the tradition that parents came back from
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work
to cook lunch for children is no longer preferable in
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many
countries, and this
also
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explains
why the
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fast
food industry is developing
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fast
in this country. Another contributing factor is that culinary
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skills
are no longer passed on to younger generations. Food outlets and restaurants
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today
offer a wide range of food choices that can satisfy even fussy eaters, meaning that cooking is not
necessarily
a
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skill
that young
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people
need to learn to cook for the family.

The gradual disappearance of
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family
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meals
has several effects.
Firstly
, having
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meals
with
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family
members is a great chance for them to bond with each other,
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so
parents have less time to talk with their children, and spouses
also
lose an opportunity to share daily stories. On the social level,
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some
traditions may
be lost
as a result
of
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people
eating out too
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often
.
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Family
values might not
be appreciated
when
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people
do not feel the need to
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come
back home after
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work
for a
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meal
. On special occasions such as New Year Eve,
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family
feasts serve as an
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important
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event
, and it is regretful that this tradition is
gradually
disappearing.

In conclusion
, various factors are attributable to the disappearance of
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family
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meals
. This has several damaging effects on both
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families
and societies.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay The tradition that family gets together to eat meals is disappearing. What are the reasons? What are the impacts on families and societies? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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