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The tradition that the family gets together to eat meals is disappearing. What are the reasons? What are the impacts? v.1

The tradition that the family gets together to eat meals is disappearing. What are the reasons? What are the impacts? v. 1
It is argued that these days, family members do not always have meals together as they used to do. There are several reasons for this situation and it can result in a variety of negative effects on family life and wellbeing. The tradition of sharing mealtimes in families is disappearing due to two main causes. Firstly, many children are too impatient to sit at the table to eat meals with their parents. They are also allowed to eat in front of the TV or computer screen. The second reason contributing to this situation is the disappear of close-knit family. In the modern world, many parents have such a hectic schedule that they cannot get home early to have meals with their children, especially in the households with mother-workers, it can be almost impossible to arrange a meal that all family members can sit together. The consequences for the family life and children’s health are serious. In terms of family, meals taken together are the best time for all family members to share news, give guidance or advice. Furthermore, family plays a significant role in shaping children’s personality during the formative years. Therefore, losing this tradition means that the family life and the pattern of children’s behavior could be affected in the negative way. In addition, for those whose parents are too busy to prepare meals may be left to eat junk food at fast food chains. This, consequently, would develop unhealthy eating habits, which are likely to cause problems on children’s health such as obesity. In conclusion, there are numerous reasons leading to the disappear of family meals and the impacts are overwhelmingly negative.
It
is argued
that these days,
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family
members do not always have
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meals
together as they
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used
to do. There are several reasons for this situation and it can result in a variety of
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negative
effects on
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family
life and
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wellbeing
. The tradition of sharing mealtimes in
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families
is disappearing due to two main causes.
Firstly
,
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many
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children
are too impatient to sit at the table to eat
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meals
with their parents. They are
also
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allowed
to eat in front of the TV or computer screen. The second reason contributing to this situation is
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the disappear
of close-knit
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family
. In the modern world,
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many
parents have such a hectic schedule that they cannot
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get
home early to have
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meals
with their
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children
,
especially
in the households with mother-workers, it can be almost impossible to arrange a
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meal
that all
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family
members can sit together. The consequences for the
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family
life and
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children’s
health are serious. In terms of
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family
,
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meals
taken together are the best time for all
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family
members to share news, give guidance or advice.
Furthermore
,
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family
plays a significant role in shaping
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children’s
personality during the formative years.
Therefore
, losing this tradition means that the
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family
life and the pattern of
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children’s
behavior could be
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affected
in the
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negative
way.
In addition
, for those whose parents are too busy to prepare
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meals
may be
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left
to eat junk food at
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fast
food chains. This,
consequently
, would develop unhealthy eating habits, which are likely to cause problems on
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children’s
health such as obesity.
In conclusion
, there are numerous reasons leading to
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the disappear
of
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family
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meals
and the impacts are
overwhelmingly
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negative
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay The tradition that the family gets together to eat meals is disappearing. What are the reasons? What are the impacts? v. 1

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
274 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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