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The tradition that famliy gets together to eat meals is disappearing. What are the reasons? What are the impacts on families and societies? v.1

The tradition that famliy gets together to eat meals is disappearing. What are the reasons? What are the impacts on families and societies? v. 1
In the fast-paced world today, it seems that the tradition of families having meals together is gradually being forgotten. From my perspective, there could be several reasons, concerning the family member themselves, behind the disappearance of this joyful activity. I also firmly believe that the lack of family-gathering time can have some serious implications on both the adults and their children. To begin, it is undeniable that what causes the separation during mealtimetime in the family may be the dense working schedule of the members. Nowadays, it is obvious that parents are working harder for a longer period of time so as to support their families. Some adults, even have to take more shifts than they were initially allotted as they are facing financial difficulties. Likewise, children now also have a more demanding workload from school, which sometimes require them to spend more time accomplishing. As a result, their time for family meals is significantly reduced. Additionally, it is also possible that there can be some sorts of disputes within the family and they prevent the parents and their kids from sitting down and enjoying a delightful meal together. This can be considered a very common reason for the phenomenon. It is inevitable that the disappearance of family meals can have several detrimental effects to the family. When they cannot spend time eating together, the family bonds are likely to be loosened, which can result in children feeling a lack of affection from their own parents. Furthermore, it is at family meals that parents shape their children's manners as well as teach them how to behave when there are guests. Therefore, kids who do not have meals with their parents frequently are less likely to develop proper manners. All in all, there are many reasons which prevent families from eating together, most of which stemming from the family members themselves. And it is clear that such lack of quality time with family can have negative impacts on the families and the children's development.
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fast
-paced world
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today
, it seems that the tradition of
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families
having
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meals
together is
gradually
being forgotten
. From my perspective, there could be several reasons, concerning the
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family
member themselves, behind the disappearance of this joyful activity. I
also
firmly
believe that the lack of family-gathering
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time
can have
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some
serious implications on both the adults and their children.

To
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begin
, it is undeniable that what causes the separation during
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mealtimetime
in the
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family
may be the dense working schedule of the members. Nowadays, it is obvious that
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parents
are working harder for a longer period of
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time
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so as to
support their
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families
.
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Some
adults, even
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have to
take more shifts than they were
initially
allotted as they are facing financial difficulties.
Likewise
, children
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now
also
have a more demanding workload from school, which
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sometimes
require them to spend more
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time
accomplishing.
As a result
, their
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time
for
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family
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meals
is
significantly
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reduced
.
Additionally
, it is
also
possible that there can be
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some
sorts of disputes within the
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family and
they
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prevent
the
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parents
and their kids from sitting down and enjoying a delightful
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meal
together. This can
be considered
a
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very
common reason for the phenomenon.

It is inevitable that the disappearance of
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family
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meals
can have several detrimental effects to the
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family
. When they cannot spend
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time
eating together, the
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family
bonds are likely to
be loosened
, which can result in children feeling a lack of affection from their
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own
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parents
.
Furthermore
, it is at
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family
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meals
that
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parents
shape their children's manners
as well
as teach them how to behave when there are guests.
Therefore
, kids who do not have
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meals
with their
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parents
frequently
are less likely to develop proper manners.

All in all, there are
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many
reasons which
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prevent
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families
from eating together, most of which stemming from the
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family
members themselves. And it is
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clear
that such lack of quality
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time
with
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family
can have
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negative
impacts on the
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families
and the children's development.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay The tradition that famliy gets together to eat meals is disappearing. What are the reasons? What are the impacts on families and societies? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
333 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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