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Some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. What are the causes? Suggest possible solutions. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience You should write at least 250 words. v.6

Some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. What are the causes? Suggest possible solutions. v. 6
Nowadays, it is commonly found that new employees do not possess collaborative skills. Our education system and inefficient training programmes are to be blamed for this situation because they fail to emphasise on team work. However, this is not a matter of concern if team activities such as sports and group projects are made part of curriculum as well as employee induction programme. Major factors behind the lack of interpersonal skills in new employees are our education system and inept trainings offered by the organisations. Many schools and colleges concentrate on improving the academic performance of the students rather than educating them on team work. As a result, students are unaware of the concepts and significance of cooperation and combined efforts. In addition, companies fail to train their potential employees in such skills. Ultimately, new joiners lack cooperative skills as they do not have knowledge of team dynamics and work. Though the above problems are prevalent, they can be overcome by encouraging sports in education institutions and interpersonal skill development training in organisations. Through sports, students can learn how to be cooperative and understand the importance of group efforts. Nurturing these values from a young age will help them when they join firms. Companies also need to conduct training programmes for new recruits on team endeavours. For instance, if a sample project is assigned to a group as part of training, employees will not only develop their technical skills but also realise the values of group work. In summary, new employees lack interpersonal skills because schools and companies neglect the importance of developing personality traits. To tackle this problem, sports should be made a part of the curriculum and organisations should arrange training sessions to enhance interpersonal skills of the individual.
Nowadays, it is
commonly
found that
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new
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employees
do not possess collaborative
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skills
. Our education system and inefficient
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training
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programmes
are to
be blamed
for this situation
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because
they fail to
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emphasise
on
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team
work.
However
, this is not a matter of concern if
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team
activities such as
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sports
and
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group
projects
are made
part of curriculum
as well
as
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employee
induction
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programme
.

Major factors behind the lack of
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interpersonal
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skills
in
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new
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employees
are our education system and inept
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trainings
offered by the
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organisations
.
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Many
schools and colleges concentrate on improving the academic performance of the students
rather
than educating them on
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team
work.
As a result
, students are unaware of the concepts and significance of cooperation and combined efforts.
In addition
,
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companies
fail to train their potential
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employees
in such
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skills
.
Ultimately
,
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new
joiners lack cooperative
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skills
as they do not have knowledge of
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team
dynamics and work.

Though the above problems are prevalent, they can
be overcome
by encouraging
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sports
in education institutions and
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interpersonal
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skill
development
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training
in
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organisations
. Through
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sports
, students can learn how to be cooperative and understand the importance of
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group
efforts. Nurturing these values from a young age will
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help
them when they
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join
firms.
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Companies
also
need to conduct
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training
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programmes
for
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new
recruits on
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team
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endeavours
.
For instance
, if a sample project
is assigned
to a
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group
as part of
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training
,
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employees
will not
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only
develop their technical
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skills
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but
also
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realise
the values of
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group
work.

In summary,
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new
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employees
lack
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interpersonal
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skills
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because
schools and
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companies
neglect the importance of developing personality traits. To tackle this problem,
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sports
should
be made
a part of the curriculum and
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organisations
should arrange
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training
sessions to enhance
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interpersonal
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skills
of the individual.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
42Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. What are the causes? Suggest possible solutions. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
291 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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