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The tradition of families getting together to eat meals is disappearing. What are the reasons? What are the impacts? v.3

The tradition of families getting together to eat meals is disappearing. What are the reasons? What are the impacts? v. 3
In recent years, it is noticeable that families are losing their habit of eating together. Some explanations for this trend will be put forward before an analysis of its effect is given. The fact that family members choose not to eat with each other can be attributed to some reasons. The first reason is the mismatch among family members’ schedule. Members of a family can have different working or studying plans in a day, therefore, it is a challenge for them to sit down to have a meal together. Instead, people will have a tendency to eat out with their friends, colleagues or business partners. Another reason is the effect of the fast food culture of people’s eating habit. Fast food seems to be ubiquitous nowadays, from fast food restaurants to food vendors on the streets with a wide range of prices. Due to this convenience, a lot of people, especially youngsters, tend to grab a meal to be quickly revitalized after hard working hours at school or work, which leads to their lack of appetite and skipping meals with their family after coming home. The trend exerts both advantageous and disadvantageous influences on individuals and families. In terms of its merits, people can benefit a lot from this since they will be much more flexible with their time. They can save a lot of time not having to show up at a fixed hour to have meals with their family and can eat whatever and whenever they want even during working. However, in terms of the negative effects, this can lead to the weakened family bond and also lack of a sense of family. If a family continuously eats separately, family members may not share their thoughts and advice to each other, hence they can feel isolated and the connection between them will be less intimate. To conclude, the tendency of eating separately in a household is caused by the difference in members’ schedule or the preference of eating fast food, and both positive and negative impacts of this can be clearly witnessed.
In recent years, it is noticeable that
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families
are losing their habit of
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eating
together.
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explanations for this trend will
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forward
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before
an analysis of its effect is
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given
.

The fact that
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family
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members
choose not to
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eat
with each other can
be attributed
to
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some
reasons. The
first
reason is the mismatch among
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family
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members’
schedule.
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Members
of a
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family
can have
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different
working or studying plans in a day,
therefore
, it is a challenge for them to sit down to have a
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meal
together.
Instead
,
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people
will have a tendency to
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eat
out with their friends, colleagues or business partners. Another reason is the effect of the
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fast
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food
culture of
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people’s
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eating
habit.
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Fast
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food
seems to be ubiquitous nowadays, from
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fast
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food
restaurants to
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food
vendors on the streets with a wide range of prices. Due to this convenience,
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a lot of
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people
,
especially
youngsters, tend to grab a
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meal
to be
quickly
revitalized after
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hard working
hours at school or work, which leads to their lack of appetite and skipping
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meals
with their
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family
after coming home.

The trend exerts both advantageous and disadvantageous influences on individuals and
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families
. In terms of its merits,
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people
can benefit a lot from this since they will be much more flexible with their time. They can save
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a lot of
time not having to
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show
up at a
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fixed
hour to have
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meals
with their
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family
and can
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eat
whatever and whenever they want even during working.
However
, in terms of the
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negative
effects, this can lead to the weakened
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family
bond and
also
lack of a sense of
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family
. If a
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family
continuously
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eats
separately
,
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family
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members
may not share their thoughts and advice to each other,
hence
they can feel isolated and the
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connection between
them will be less intimate.

To conclude
, the tendency of
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eating
separately
in a household
is caused
by the difference in
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members’
schedule or the preference of
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eating
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fast
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food
, and both
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positive
and
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negative
impacts of this can be
clearly
witnessed.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The tradition of families getting together to eat meals is disappearing. What are the reasons? What are the impacts? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
344 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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