Although such topics, in all likelihood, never will yield a consensual agreement, a constructive dialogue on increased dedication towards the job reduces time for personal life can lead to thought-provoking discussions. My view is that irrespective of the numerous arguments that exist on either side, this is causing a major trouble with many families.
To commence with, people are unable to spend time with their family. It is important to note that because the person has a of lot work at the office, he may not able to reach home on time and hence unable to be with his family members. For example, spending more 10 hours in office will force to reduce time for other necessary work at home such as sleep, and daily routine tasks. Therefore, the aforementioned discussion shows that due to more work time at job leaves little time with family.
Another pivotal aspect of the argument is that the people get more addicted to work. When people spend more time at job it creates a metal bonding with office, and hence hesitates to leave work on time. For instance, when a person work more than 10 hours daily for more than a month can rewire his brain, so that he will be addicted to work. This clearly indicates less time for personal life.
In conclusion, this essay discussed spending little time with family because people are addicted to work, which is now becoming a widespread problem. This equally potential evidence to support the arguments I have provided, underlines my opinion.
Although such topics, in all likelihood,
never will yield
a consensual agreement, a constructive dialogue on increased dedication towards the job
reduces
time
for personal life can lead to
thought
-provoking discussions. My view is that irrespective of the numerous arguments that exist on either side, this is causing a major trouble with
many
families.
To commence with,
people
are unable to spend
time
with their family. It is
important
to note that
because
the person has
a
of lot
work
at the office, he may not able to reach home on
time
and
hence
unable to be with his family members.
For example
, spending more 10 hours in office will force to
reduce
time
for other necessary
work
at home such as sleep, and daily routine tasks.
Therefore
, the aforementioned discussion
shows
that due to more
work
time
at job
leaves
little
time
with family.
Another pivotal aspect of the argument is that the
people
get
more addicted to
work
. When
people
spend more
time
at job it creates a metal bonding with office, and
hence
hesitates to
leave
work
on
time
.
For instance
, when a person
work
more than 10 hours daily for more than a month can rewire his brain,
so
that he will
be addicted
to
work
. This
clearly
indicates less
time
for personal life.
In conclusion
, this essay discussed spending
little
time
with family
because
people
are addicted
to
work
, which is
now
becoming a widespread problem. This
equally
potential evidence to support the arguments I have provided, underlines my opinion.
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