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The three pie charts show the proportion of four kinds of vehicles used in the UK in 1965, 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. v.1

The three pie charts show the proportion of four kinds of vehicles used in the UK in 1965, 1985 and 2005.
The population of the earth is not keeping pace with the amount of food produced, resulting in a worldwide food shortage. Under such circumstances, it is thought by some that using genetically modified food can resolve the crisis. I concur with this as genetically modified food offer more yield at a cheaper cost and in adverse climatic conditions. Firstly, the population of humans is increasing at an exponential rate leading to deforestation and more arid regions and consequently leaving less idle farming land and lower food production to feed more mouths globally. For instance, the WHO has predicted that 70% more food would need to be produced by 2050 to alleviate hunger problems. Genetically modified food is able to survive harsh weather such as heat and less moist soil and in addition, more resistant to bacteria and fungi, thus having a significantly higher crop yield. There are many people who feel that food shouldn't be tampered with and they refuse to consume these. However, food manufactured using such a process is often cheaper and therefore, affordable to the masses. Also, its nutritional values, as well as shelf life, can be elevated. Many people are not able to have access to food due to poverty or are suffering from malnutrition. This is evident from the fact that 56% of Africa's population are food deprived as they cannot afford it, leading to malnutrition in around 64% of the children. Laboratory produced food can aid the poor in having access to healthy food which is full of nourishment. To conclude, to combat starvation and the environmental problems resulting in less farmable land, genetically modified food can assist by producing more crops under the same conditions. It can also succour the destitute by providing nutrition-rich food at a lower cost.
The population of the earth is not keeping pace with the amount of
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food
produced, resulting in a worldwide
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food
shortage. Under such circumstances, it is
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by
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some
that using
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genetically
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modified
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food
can resolve the crisis. I concur with this as
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genetically
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modified
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food
offer more yield at a cheaper cost and in adverse climatic conditions.

Firstly
, the population of humans is increasing at an exponential rate leading to deforestation and more arid regions and
consequently
leaving less idle farming land and lower
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food
production to feed more mouths globally.
For instance
, the WHO has predicted that 70% more
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food
would need to
be produced
by 2050 to alleviate hunger problems.
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Genetically
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modified
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food
is able to survive harsh weather such as heat and less moist soil and
in addition
, more resistant to bacteria and fungi,
thus
having a
significantly
higher crop yield.

There are
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many
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people
who feel that
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food
shouldn't
be tampered
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with and
they refuse to consume these.
However
,
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food
manufactured using such a process is
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often
cheaper and
therefore
, affordable to the masses.
Also
, its nutritional values,
as well
as shelf life, can
be elevated
.
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Many
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people
are not able to have access to
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food
due to poverty or are suffering from malnutrition. This is evident from the fact that 56% of Africa's population are
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food
deprived as they cannot afford it, leading to malnutrition in around 64% of the children. Laboratory produced
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food
can aid the poor in having access to healthy
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food
which is full of nourishment.

To conclude
, to combat starvation and the environmental problems resulting in less
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farmable
land,
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genetically
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modified
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food
can assist by producing more crops under the same conditions. It can
also
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succour
the destitute by providing nutrition-rich
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food
at a lower cost.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay The three pie charts show the proportion of four kinds of vehicles used in the UK in 1965, 1985 and 2005.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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