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Some people think that they can learn much more by themselves than if they work with a teacher Others think that it is always better to get help from a skilled teacher Which do you prefer Use specific reasons to support your choice v.1

Some people think that they can learn much more by themselves than if they work with a teacher Others think that it is always better to get help from a skilled teacher Which do you prefer Use specific reasons to support your choice v. 1
A Few individual’s opinion that testing on animals for any purpose is awful and it should be restricted. While some masses believe that using animals for these tests gives mankind the opportunity to grow medically. I believe that testing on these creatures can be a boom to the society in times of pandemic disease. However this essay will shed some light on the both aspects of these experiments. To begin with, From the time of contemporary era, Animals are being used by scientist for a new research or experiment and we all know that this has led to an imbalance between the flora and fauna, as they both are dependent on each other. So it should be banned. For an illustration this imbalance between the two has led to global warming and many more. Secondly, The testing on animals is being carried out by experts, so that we can find new vaccination for some serious or chronic disease or medical advancement of the nation. These Experiments can prove a boon to a nation in times of medical emergencies. For an illustration, at the present time when the whole world is struggling to fight against corona virus, this research on animals can help us to develop a suitable vaccination that can cure the corona virus and help the mankind as no human being is ready provide his body to try anything new on him. To conclude this, I support that research on animals is the realistic way to develop something new. Moreover to save the mankind, we need someone to sacrifice.
A Few individual’s opinion that testing on
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animals
for any purpose is awful and it should
be restricted
. While
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some
masses believe that using
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animals
for these
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tests
gives mankind the opportunity to grow
medically
. I believe that testing on these creatures can be a boom to the society in
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times
of pandemic disease.
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However
this essay will shed
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some
light on the both aspects of these experiments.

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with, From the
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time
of contemporary era,
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Animals
are being
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used
by scientist for a
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new
research or
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experiment and
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So
it should
be banned
. For an illustration this imbalance between the two has led to global warming and
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more.

Secondly
, The testing on
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is
being carried
out by experts,
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so
that we can find
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new
vaccination for
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some
serious or chronic disease or medical advancement of the nation. These Experiments can prove a boon to a nation in
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times
of medical emergencies. For an illustration, at the present
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time
when the whole world is struggling to fight against
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corona virus
, this research on
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animals
can
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help
us to develop a suitable vaccination that can cure the
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corona virus
and
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the mankind as no human being is ready provide his body to try anything
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new
on him.

To conclude
this, I support that research on
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animals
is the realistic way to develop something
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new
.
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Moreover
to save the mankind, we need someone to sacrifice.
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IELTS essay Some people think that they can learn much more by themselves than if they work with a teacher Others think that it is always better to get help from a skilled teacher Which do you prefer Use specific reasons to support your choice v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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