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tpo36 2 Some people buy food that is already prepared Other people buy fresh food and prepare meals themselves Which do you prefer Explain why using details and examples in your answer v.1

tpo36 2 Some people buy food that is already prepared Other people buy fresh food and prepare meals themselves Which do you prefer Explain why using details and examples in your answer v. 1
Over the world, there are several ancient buildings available which are very costly to reconstruct and overlook. I completely agree with this view and I think the authority should lay out this property on developing up to date buildings instead of spending bill on primitive buildings. On the one hand, redevelopment and taking care of outdated building is dissipated of payment because those buildings are hazardous for everyone, anytime it may demolish and there is no guarantee for those establishments. A building of Bangladesh is Rana Plaza was a great illustration of this, around seven years ago this building was destroyed and tens of thousands of people died. Another significant reason is that old buildings have no source of income, those types of establishments are used for exhibitions. As a consequence, government should invest wage on new skyscrapers instead of ancient buildings. On the other hand, constructing modern skyscrapers means progressing country. When a contemporary building is founded that time, many people may obtain works and people are able to do business in the building. By this way people can earn bill and economy of a country will be increased day bay day. For instance, prosperous country always tries to develop modern buildings like Buzz Khalifa, which is a biggest skyscraper in the world and the owner of this gain big amount of money. For this reason I think spending wealth on primitive building is squandered of pay. Bureaucrats should consume this capital on fresh buildings. In conclusion, this essay explored that outdated construction is dangerous for our lives because it may ravage anytime. Also mentioned that modern skyscrapers are work for source of income, and several people can earn payment by working here. In my opinion, Investing property on old buildings means spend like water, for this reason I agree with this statement.
Over the world, there are several ancient
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buildings
available which are
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very
costly to reconstruct and overlook. I completely
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agree
with this view and I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
the authority should lay out this property on developing up to date
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buildings
instead
of spending bill on primitive buildings.

On the one hand, redevelopment and taking care of outdated
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building
is dissipated
of payment
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because
those
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buildings
are hazardous for everyone, anytime it may demolish and there is no guarantee for those establishments. A
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building
of Bangladesh is
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Rana
Plaza was a great illustration of this, around seven years ago this
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building
was
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destroyed
and tens of thousands of
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people
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died
. Another significant reason is that
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old
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buildings
have no source of income, those types of establishments are
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used
for exhibitions. As a consequence,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should invest wage on new
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skyscrapers
instead
of ancient buildings.

On the other hand
, constructing modern
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skyscrapers
means progressing country. When a contemporary
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building
is founded
that time,
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many
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people
may obtain works and
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people
are able to do business in the
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building
. By this way
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people
can earn bill and economy of a country will
be increased
day bay day.
For instance
, prosperous country always tries to develop modern
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buildings
like Buzz Khalifa, which is
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a
biggest
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skyscraper
in the world and the owner of this gain
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big
amount of money.
For this reason
I
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think
spending wealth on primitive
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building
is squandered
of pay. Bureaucrats should consume this capital on fresh buildings.

In conclusion
, this essay explored that outdated construction is
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dangerous
for our
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lives
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because
it may ravage anytime.
Also
mentioned that modern
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skyscrapers
are work for source of income, and several
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
can earn payment by working here. In my opinion, Investing property on
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
means spend like water,
for this reason
I
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agree
with this statement.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay tpo36 2 Some people buy food that is already prepared Other people buy fresh food and prepare meals themselves Which do you prefer Explain why using details and examples in your answer v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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