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The three bar charts show average years of schooling, numbers of scientists and technicians, and research and development spending in developing and developed countries. Figures aregiven for 1980 and 1990. v.1

The three bar charts show average years of schooling, numbers of scientists and technicians, and research and development spending in developing and developed countries. Figures aregiven for 1980 and 1990. v. 1
Home based employment is gradually rising as several individuals are able to perform their office duties from their own residence. This essay will first, discuss the minimization of travel stress and time as well as reducing the company's travel related payment paid to employees as the advantages and further, outing complete isolation and no monitoring of employees as the disadvantages. One of the principle advantages of working from home is that employees will neither have to waste their time nor suffer any pressure in covering long distances from home to office and back. This is to say, employees can carry out all their office tasks and duties at the convenience of their home, without wasting hours on the road to reach office. To elucidate, a recent survey by The Times in March 2019 showed that more than 80 percent people choose home based jobs so that they can avoid wasting their time in travelling to office. The main disadvantage of carrying out office work at home is that employees have a feeling of loneliness and boring environment. In other words, people feel depressed when working from home as there is no social interaction with other teammates and bosses. Unlike, when performing their duties at the office premise where they get the opportunity to interact and communicate with other employees and thus creates a friendly and warm environment. To exemplify, a recent study by The New York Times on May 2017 showed that more than 60 percent of people who are working from home suffer from some form of depressions and are prescribed antidepressant by the doctor. To conclude, the merit of home based employment is that it eliminated the travelling time and anxiety. The demerit, however, is the complete separation and seclusion of people with other members in the office.
Home based employment is
gradually
rising as several individuals are able to perform their
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office
duties from their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
residence. This essay will
first
, discuss the minimization of travel
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stress
and
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time
as well
as reducing the
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company
's travel related payment paid to
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employees
as the advantages and
further
, outing complete isolation and no monitoring of
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employees
as the disadvantages.

One of the
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principle
advantages of working from home is that
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employees
will neither
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have to
waste their
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time
nor suffer any pressure in covering long distances from home to
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office
and back. This is to say,
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employees
can carry out all their
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office
tasks and duties at the convenience of their home, without wasting hours on the road to reach
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office
. To elucidate, a recent survey by The
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Times
in March 2019
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showed
that more than 80 percent
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people
choose home based jobs
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so
that they can avoid wasting their
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time
in travelling to office.

The main disadvantage of carrying out
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office
work at home is that
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employees
have a feeling of loneliness and boring environment. In
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other
words,
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people
feel depressed when working from home as there is no social interaction with
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other
teammates and bosses. Unlike, when performing their duties at the
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office
premise where they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the opportunity to interact and communicate with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
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employees
and
thus
creates a friendly and warm environment. To exemplify, a recent study by The New York
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Times
on May 2017
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
showed
that more than 60 percent of
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people
who are working from home suffer from
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some
form of depressions and
are prescribed
antidepressant by the doctor.

To conclude
, the merit of home based employment is that it eliminated the travelling
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time
and anxiety. The demerit,
however
, is the complete separation and seclusion of
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people
with
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other
members in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
office
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The three bar charts show average years of schooling, numbers of scientists and technicians, and research and development spending in developing and developed countries. Figures aregiven for 1980 and 1990. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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