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The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience. v.9

The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages. v. 9
These days, there is an ongoing debate between people about nuclear weapons and technology, Some people believe that nuclear weapons are responsible for world peace and the other believes that nuclear technology is the main source of low-cost energy. My view is that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. In this essay, I shall explain my point of view by analysing both sides of the argument. There are several reasons why nuclear technology is not beneficial to mankind. One of then is that every country that do not have nuclear weapons are afraid of those countries who have them. Nuclear countries are most the time threaten non-nuclear countries. For example, Jupiter who always gives threats to their neighbour countries because of nuclear power. It can also be argued that the aftereffects of nuclear weapons make a great impact on the people who are living in that area. The perfect example is home where still the children born with disabilities. On the other side, there are people who think that nuclear technology is beneficial to mankind. First, It is claimed that nuclear weapons are maintaining world peace but this peace can be maintained by other means as well. For example, wars free agreements or weapons free countries. While there are strong arguments on both sides of the case. My personal opinion is that nuclear technology is not the main reason for world peace and the disadvantages of nuclear technology are far more than advantages. I would strongly recommend that further research on this technology should band immediately.
These days, there is an ongoing debate between
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people
about nuclear
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weapons
and
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technology
,
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Some
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people
believe that nuclear
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weapons
are responsible for world
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peace
and the other believes that nuclear
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technology
is the main source of low-cost energy. My view is that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. In this essay, I shall
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explain
my point of view by
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analysing
both sides of the argument.

There are several reasons why nuclear
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technology
is not beneficial to mankind. One of then is that every
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country
that do not have nuclear
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weapons
are afraid of those
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countries
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who
have them. Nuclear
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countries
are most the time threaten non-nuclear
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countries
.
For example
, Jupiter
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who
always gives threats to their
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neighbour
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countries
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because
of nuclear power. It can
also
be argued
that the aftereffects of nuclear
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weapons
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make
a great impact on the
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people
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who
are living in that area. The perfect example is home where
still
the children born with disabilities.

On the other side, there are
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people
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who
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think
that nuclear
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technology
is beneficial to mankind.
First
, It
is claimed
that nuclear
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weapons
are maintaining world
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peace
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but
this
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peace
can
be maintained
by other means
as well
.
For example
, wars free agreements or
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weapons
free countries.

While there are strong arguments on both sides of the case. My personal opinion is that nuclear
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technology
is not the main reason for world
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peace
and the disadvantages of nuclear
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technology
are far more than advantages. I would
strongly
recommend that
further
research on this
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technology
should band immediately.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages. v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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