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Some people believe that it is better to get advice from old people compared to young people. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and include relevant examples. v.5

Some people believe that it is better to get advice from old people compared to young people. Give your opinion and include relevant examples. v. 5
Consultation or getting advice is nowadays is a profession. Bygone is the era when people used to get the consultation from their elders at home, now they just make one first let their elders know afterward. Some people accord that getting a recommendation from senior people is better than from young ones. This essay will discuss whether getting advice from dissent is the best option or from old aged people and provide the evidence that why it's strongly recommended to get advice from old people is better. To embark on, as the saying goes, Experience is the best teacher. Likewise, old aged people have more knowledge and experience than any child or any other person in the family. For example, a study shows that older people provide the best solution to every problem. The reason is that sometimes they had already faced that situation or may know someone who has the problem in the past which make you get genuine solution of your problems. Therefore, they can judge and analyse the cause easily and take out you from any circumstances. Thus, senior people with more experience and knowledge will always guide you right and shows your best path. However, with some circumstances they are too narrow minded and get give you the best a consultation. For instance, if you want to go to the party they will suggest you what they used to wear that's what you should be wearing too, that's why it's impossible to get a better recommendation in case of any fashion or technology. Thus, these advices one can only get from the youngsters as they have a better sense of fashion as well as what gadgets is better to buy. Thus, getting suggestions on trend or technology from old people is not a good option. To recapitulate, to attain knowledge or to find business or financial solutions one must always take the view from the senior citizen due to a lot of experience regardless of fashion and technology youngsters are better to get thinking about these things.
Consultation or getting
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advice
is nowadays is a profession. Bygone is the era when
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people
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used
to
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get
the consultation from their elders at home,
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now
they
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just
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make
one
first
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let
their elders know afterward.
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Some
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people
accord that getting a recommendation from senior
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people
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is
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better
than from young ones. This essay will discuss whether getting
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advice
from dissent is the
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best
option or from
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old
aged
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people
and provide the evidence that why it's
strongly
recommended to
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get
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advice
from
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old
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people
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is
better.

To embark on, as the saying goes,
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Experience
is the
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best
teacher.
Likewise
,
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old
aged
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people
have more knowledge and
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experience
than any child or any other person in the family.
For example
, a study
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shows
that older
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people
provide the
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best
solution to every problem. The reason is that
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sometimes
they had already faced that situation or may know someone who has the problem in the past which
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make
you
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get
genuine solution of your problems.
Therefore
, they can judge and
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analyse
the cause
easily
and take out you from any circumstances.
Thus
, senior
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people
with more
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experience
and knowledge will always guide you right and
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shows
your
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best
path.

However
, with
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some
circumstances they are too
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narrow minded
and
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get
give you the
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best
a consultation.
For instance
, if you want to go to the party they will suggest you what they
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used
to wear that's what you should be wearing too, that's why it's impossible to
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get
a
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better
recommendation in case of any fashion or technology.
Thus
, these
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advices
one can
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only
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get
from the youngsters as they have a
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better
sense of fashion
as well
as what gadgets
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is
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better
to
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buy
.
Thus
, getting suggestions on trend or technology from
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old
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people
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is
not a
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good
option.

To recapitulate, to attain knowledge or to find business or financial solutions one
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must
always take the view from the senior citizen due to
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a lot of
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experience
regardless of fashion and technology youngsters are
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better
to
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get
thinking about these things.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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Johann Wolfgang von Goethe

IELTS essay Some people believe that it is better to get advice from old people compared to young people. Give your opinion and include relevant examples. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
341 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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