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The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience. v.5

The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages. v. 5
Nuclear weapons are the most deadly weapons in the world. It can be used to intimidate other countries to avoid war; additionally, it is a very inexpensive and tidy source of power. For these reasons It is often believed that the advantages of nuclear technology offset the disadvantages of its state of affairs but I personally strongly disagree with this point of view as a nuclear weapon is a proven human destructive weapon and nuclear technology is not completely safe. This essay will consider the benefit and drawbacks of nuclear technology. Therefore, although the nuclear power plant is a cheap source of energy, it is dangerous for humans. First of all, there are many drawbacks to nuclear technology. The most cited one is that the nuclear power plant may create a devastating accident. All the nuclear power stations create heavy radiation. While the safety measure of the nuclear power plant does not work, those radiations can spread in the surrounding areas and may kill the inhabitants. Taking Russia as an example, one of the Russian power plants partially busted in 1980 which killed 100 people and destroyed 12000 square kilometers of area. Furthermore, a nuclear weapon is a great threat to humanity. A medium-size nuclear weapon can destroy an entire city. These kinds of bombs not only kill people but also destroy their future generation. If a country applies a nuclear bomb against another country, then the affected country will also use the nuclear bomb. Therefore, if a nuclear war began, the entire civilization may be destroyed. For example, in the second world war when the United State of America used nuclear weapons against Japan, two cities of japan were completely destroyed. In conclusion, it is very obvious that despite having some advantages nuclear technology is not beneficial for humans as a nuclear power plant is dangerous for the existence of its surrounding people, additionally, nuclear weapons are a great threat to civilization.
Nuclear
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weapons
are the most deadly
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weapons
in the world. It can be
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used
to intimidate other
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countries
to avoid war;
additionally
, it is a
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very
inexpensive and tidy source of
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power
. For these reasons It is
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often
believed that the advantages of nuclear
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technology
offset the disadvantages of its state of affairs
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but
I
personally
strongly
disagree with this point of view as a nuclear
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weapon
is a proven human destructive
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weapon
and nuclear
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technology
is not completely safe. This essay will consider the benefit and drawbacks of nuclear
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technology
.
Therefore
, although the nuclear
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power
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plant
is a
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cheap
source of energy, it is
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dangerous
for humans.

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First of all
, there are
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many
drawbacks to nuclear
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technology
. The most cited one is that the nuclear
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power
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plant
may create a devastating accident. All the nuclear
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power
stations create heavy radiation. While the safety measure of the nuclear
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power
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plant
does not work, those radiations can spread in the surrounding areas and may kill the inhabitants. Taking Russia as an example, one of the Russian
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power
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plants
partially
busted in 1980 which killed 100
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people
and
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destroyed
12000 square kilometers of area.

Furthermore
, a nuclear
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weapon
is a great threat to humanity. A medium-size nuclear
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weapon
can
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destroy
an entire city. These kinds of bombs not
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only
kill
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people
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but
also
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destroy
their future generation. If a
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country
applies a nuclear bomb against another
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country
, then the
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affected
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country
will
also
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use
the nuclear bomb.
Therefore
, if a nuclear war began, the entire civilization may be
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destroyed
.
For example
, in the second world war when the United State of America
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used
nuclear
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weapons
against Japan, two cities of japan were completely
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destroyed
.

In conclusion
, it is
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very
obvious that despite having
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some
advantages nuclear
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technology
is not beneficial for humans as a nuclear
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power
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plant
is
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dangerous
for the existence of its surrounding
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people
,
additionally
, nuclear
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weapons
are a great threat to civilization.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
323 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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