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The television is good for you. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of watching television. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.2

The television is good for you. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of watching television. v. 2
Television is considered to be a good means of entertainment for all generations. It is also helpful in terms of education. However, having bad exposure to television can be detrimental. There are several benefits and limitations of watching television, which will now be discussed. Firstly, television is a good source of time pass for elder people, who stay alone at home most of the time. Also, various educational programs are broadcasted on television that are quite helpful for children. Moreover, people get to know about the latest news of the world from different news channels. We can gain the knowledge of current affairs and any other topic from television. Furthermore, there are several local channels that air the programs related to the local events of the city. Admittedly, many shows on TV contain a lot of violent and vicious content that can have a bad influence on people, especially on youth. Some reality shows, for instance crime patrol, give the scandalous and wicked picture of society. Many youngsters become aggressive and wild after watching such outrageous programs on TV and this can sometime encourage people in doing criminal activities. To conclude, it is an absolute individual choice of people on what programs they should watch on television. If programs are chosen wisely, then television is a very useful device. Otherwise, it can have a negative impact on our society.
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Television
is considered
to be a
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good
means of entertainment for all generations. It is
also
helpful in terms of education.
However
, having
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bad
exposure to
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television
can be detrimental. There are several benefits and limitations of watching
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television
, which will
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now
be discussed
.

Firstly
,
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television
is a
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good
source of time pass for elder
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people
, who stay alone at home most of the time.
Also
, various educational
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programs
are broadcasted
on
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television
that are quite helpful for children.
Moreover
,
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people
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get
to know about the latest news of the world from
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different
news channels. We can gain the knowledge of
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current
affairs and any other topic from
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television
.
Furthermore
, there are several local channels that air the
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programs
related to the local
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events
of the city.

Admittedly
,
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many
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shows
on TV contain
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a lot of
violent and vicious content that can have a
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bad
influence on
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people
,
especially
on youth.
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Some
reality
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shows
,
for instance
crime patrol, give the scandalous and wicked picture of society.
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Many
youngsters become aggressive and wild after watching such outrageous
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programs
on TV and this can sometime encourage
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people
in doing criminal activities.

To conclude
, it is an absolute individual choice of
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people
on what
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programs
they should
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watch
on
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television
. If
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programs
are chosen
wisely
, then
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television
is a
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very
useful device.
Otherwise
, it can have a
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negative
impact on our society.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The television is good for you. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of watching television. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
229 words
This writing has been penalized,
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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