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Nowadays media should include more good news in their publications Do you agree or disagree with this statement Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. . . . Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.1

Nowadays media should include more good news in their publications . . . v. 1
Mass media have a powerful influence in shaping our lives. Some people believe that more positive news stories should be delivered by the media, and I do agree with this statement as it would bring happiness in people's lives, and build trust towards governments. To begin with, the addition of more good headlines would bring positivity among people. The reason for this is that every individual, regardless of age, becomes more optimistic after watching good content on TV. For instance, news of the discovery of novel medicine for any fatal disease helps the individuals to believe in science. In contrast, if bad news, such as robbery and murders would be published excessively in the newspaper, then the readers become pessimistic and live in fear. Therefore, it is crucial for news editors keep in mind about the attitude of the public before telecasting the particular news. Another point to consider is that the printing of hopeful information would build trust among the citizens. In other words, they might start believing and supporting their leaders if they read the reports of their accomplishments. A research study revealed that in the countries where citizens have lesser faith in their authorities, more protests used to occur because they doubt most of their government's policies. Moreover, nowadays, negative news is quite common, consequently, it becomes a need to telecast the cover stories, which would bring cheer over the faces of folks. In conclusion, although media organisation should deliver crucial news-reports, additional cheerful stories would bring joy in the lives of people. In my opinion, additional good news would increase the sense of security among common public, leading to boosted confidence towards the authorities.
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people
believe that more
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positive
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news
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bring
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people
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lives
, and build trust towards
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governments
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begin
with, the addition of more
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good
headlines would
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bring
positivity among
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people
.
The reason for this is
that every individual, regardless of age, becomes more optimistic after watching
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good
content on TV.
For instance
,
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news
of the discovery of novel medicine for any fatal disease
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helps
the individuals to believe in science.
In contrast
, if
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bad
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news
, such as robbery and murders would
be published
excessively
in the newspaper, then the readers become pessimistic and
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live
in fear.
Therefore
, it is crucial for
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news
editors
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keep
in mind about the attitude of the public
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before
telecasting the particular news.

Another point to consider is that the printing of hopeful information would build trust among the citizens.
In other words
, they might
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start
believing and supporting their leaders if they read the reports of their accomplishments. A research study revealed that in the countries where citizens have lesser faith in their authorities, more protests
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used
to occur
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because
they doubt most of their
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government
's policies.
Moreover
, nowadays,
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negative
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news
is quite common,
consequently
, it becomes a need to telecast the cover stories, which would
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bring
cheer over the faces of folks.

In conclusion
, although media
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organisation
should deliver crucial news-reports, additional cheerful stories would
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bring
joy in the
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lives
of
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people
. In my opinion, additional
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good
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news
would increase the sense of security among common public, leading to boosted confidence towards the authorities.
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IELTS essay Nowadays media should include more good news in their publications . . . v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
9
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 9.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 9.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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