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The television is good for people. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of watching television. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.2

The television is good for people. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of watching television. v. 2
There is an issue about the influence of television on society. Some media presenters think that it is advantageous to the public, while some social workers argue that it creates many problems. This essay will consider the pros and cons of this source of information. Let us start with the advantages of spending time watching television. The first positive side is that people are aware of new products in the market through advertisements on TV. TV viewers usually know about the emergence of either high-quality products or burning travel package, so they can purchase them earlier than those who ignore this sort of media. Another merit is that they always have fresh topics from television programs to discuss. People can have heated discussions with others, such as classmates and colleagues, about what they learn from TV, while the rest have nothing to keep the conversation going. Furthermore, television gives people the opportunity to relax. People, who are subjected to hard work, can relieve stress, because they can entertain themselves by different TV programs as well as movies. Despite the positives effects of television, it has many demerits. Firstly, TV audience waste too much time. People could do more household chores, if they devoted less time to watching different channels, unproductively lying on the sofa. Secondly, they also receive a great deal of unnecessary information from TV. Television is mostly full of useless talk shows, which enlighten nothing meaningful, but constant family quarrels as well as the private life of celebrities. Moreover, TV viewers tend to gain excessive weight. They gradually becomes plump over time, if they spend overly much time in front of TV motionless, which usually results in obesity. In conclusion, even though television cause many advantages, it also has many negative sides, which people have to deal with, if they are squandering a lot time watching TV.
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television
on society.
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media presenters
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think
that it is advantageous to the public, while
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some
social workers argue that it creates
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many
problems. This essay will consider the pros and cons of this source of information.

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Let
us
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start
with the advantages of spending
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time
watching
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television
. The
first
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positive
side is that
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people
are aware of new products in the market through advertisements on TV. TV viewers
usually
know about the emergence of either high-quality products or burning travel package,
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so
they can
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purchase
them earlier than those who
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ignore
this sort of media. Another merit is that they always have fresh topics from
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television
programs to discuss.
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People
can have heated discussions with others, such as classmates and colleagues, about what they learn from TV, while the rest have nothing to
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keep
the conversation going.
Furthermore
,
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gives
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people
the opportunity to relax.
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People
, who
are subjected
to
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hard
work, can relieve
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stress
,
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because
they can entertain themselves by
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different
TV programs
as well
as movies.

Despite the positives effects of
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, it has
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many
demerits.
Firstly
, TV audience waste too much
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time
.
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People
could do more household chores, if they devoted less
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time
to watching
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different
channels,
unproductively
lying on the sofa.
Secondly
, they
also
receive a great deal of unnecessary information from TV.
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Television
is
mostly
full of useless talk
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shows
, which enlighten nothing meaningful,
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but
constant family quarrels
as well
as the private life of celebrities.
Moreover
, TV viewers tend to gain excessive weight. They
gradually
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becomes
plump over
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time
, if they spend
overly
much
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time
in front of TV motionless, which
usually
results in obesity.

In conclusion
,
even though
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television
cause
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many
advantages, it
also
has
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many
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negative
sides, which
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people
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have to
deal with, if they are squandering a lot
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time
watching TV.
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19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The television is good for people. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of watching television. v. 2

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  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
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