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Individual can do nothing to improve the enviroment; only goverment and large companies make differece. what extended do you agree or disagree? v.1

Individual can do nothing to improve the enviroment; only goverment and large companies make differece. what extended v. 1
The world has been suffering from the burning issue of global warming which has plays prominent role in global problems, mainly as the result of environment, the authority and giant companies should take conscious step to improve environment. I am partially disagree with this statement and evaluate some causes in below paragraphs. Paradoxically, individual can play indispensable role to improve the environment. First of all, they stop using of private transportation and then they start using of eco-friendly vehicles such as bicycle. Also they should give us support to the authority and, also make us discipline. Moreover, they start using of paper things rather than plastics and last they should celebrate ecofriendly day. By celebrating eco-friendly day, masses are aware about what to do and what not to do. On the other hand, government and large companies can also play a vital role to improve the environment. First step government should start awareness campaign in countryside and urban area to aware about this issue. Also larger companies should make strict norms against some particular products such as plastic. Furthermore, authority should make strict rules and regulation against some self-centric people and also implemented heavy penalties. For instance, in 2012, CANADA impose a rule that each house grow a one tree infront of house. So that is better way to improve this environment. Agglomerating all the points elaborated above, it can be concluded that government also helps to improve the environment but individual also play a major role to improve the environment.
The world has been suffering from the burning issue of global warming which has
plays
prominent
role
in global problems,
mainly
as the result of
environment
, the authority and giant
companies
should take conscious step to
improve
environment
. I am
partially
disagree
with this statement and evaluate
some
causes in below paragraphs.

Paradoxically
, individual can
play
indispensable
role
to
improve
the
environment
.
First of all
, they
stop
using of private
transportation and
then they
start
using of eco-friendly vehicles such as bicycle.
Also
they should give us support to the authority and,
also
make
us discipline.
Moreover
, they
start
using of paper things
rather
than plastics and last they should celebrate
ecofriendly
day. By celebrating eco-friendly day, masses are aware about what to do and what not to do.

On the other hand
,
government
and large
companies
can
also
play
a vital
role
to
improve
the
environment
.
First
step
government
should
start
awareness campaign in countryside and urban area to aware about this issue.
Also
larger
companies
should
make
strict norms against
some
particular products such as plastic.
Furthermore
, authority should
make
strict
rules
and regulation against
some
self-centric
people
and
also
implemented heavy penalties.
For instance
, in 2012, CANADA impose a
rule
that each
house
grow a one tree
infront
of
house
.
So
that is
better
way to
improve
this environment.

Agglomerating all the points elaborated above, it can
be concluded
that
government
also
helps
to
improve
the
environment
but
individual
also
play
a major
role
to
improve
the
environment
.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Individual can do nothing to improve the enviroment; only goverment and large companies make differece. what extended v. 1

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