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The table shows the number of foreign visitor to 7 countries. Summarize the information by selecting the reporting and make comparison where relevant. v.1

The table shows the number of foreign visitor to 7 countries.
It shows that an increasing number of people are willing to buy those products with famous designer labels. In this essay, I will discuss some possible reasons for this phenomenon, and personally, this trend could lead to the negative consequences Firstly, the rise in the consumption of branded products can be seen as the result of the celebrity effect. It is obvious that these products are manufactured by large companies, who will hire the pop stars to speak for their products so that these companies can gain more interests. As fans of these stars, in order to follow the pace of their idols, they will actively buy these products. Secondly, it is believed that branded products in common, are with high quality and long service life, especially those tech products. In addition, people have a desire to fit in, whether at school, work or in social circles. For this reason, people sometimes buy brands because they believe the brands will contribute to greater social acceptance. This is especially true in fashion. However, this consuming pattern has caused negative impacts. On an individual level, people who choose branded goods have to spend more money on their living costs than those purchasing common goods. This is because almost all branded products come with high prices. Besides, from an economic perspective, this trend has caused a decline in the sales of other generic brands. Therefore, those who live on these jobs may go unemployed, which endangers the social economy and stability. In conclusion, people have the right to decide whether to buy branded products or not. Indeed, it’s a personal choice. However, since the adverse effects, this trend should be prevented.
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designer labels. In this essay, I will discuss
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possible reasons for this phenomenon, and
personally
, this trend could lead to the
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negative
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consequences


Firstly
, the rise in the consumption of
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branded
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products
can be
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seen
as the result of the celebrity effect. It is obvious that these
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products
are manufactured
by large
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companies
, who will hire the pop stars to speak for their
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products
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so
that these
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companies
can gain more interests. As fans of these stars, in order to follow the pace of their idols, they will
actively
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buy
these
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products
.
Secondly
, it
is believed
that
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branded
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products
in common, are with high quality and long service life,
especially
those tech
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products
.
In addition
,
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people
have a desire to fit in, whether at school, work or in social circles.
For this reason
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people
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sometimes
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buy
brands
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because
they believe the brands will contribute to greater social acceptance. This is
especially
true in fashion.

However
, this consuming pattern has caused
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negative
impacts. On an individual level,
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people
who choose
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branded
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goods
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have to
spend more money on their living costs than those purchasing common
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goods
. This is
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because
almost all
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branded
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come
with high prices.
Besides
, from an economic perspective, this trend has caused a decline in the sales of other generic brands.
Therefore
, those who
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live
on these jobs may go unemployed, which endangers the social economy and stability.

In conclusion
,
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people
have the right to decide whether to
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buy
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branded
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products
or not.
Indeed
, it’s a personal choice.
However
, since the adverse effects, this trend should be
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prevented
.
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IELTS essay The table shows the number of foreign visitor to 7 countries.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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