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The table highlights data on the number of travellers using three major british airports between 1998 and 2003. v.1

The table highlights data on the number of travellers using three major british airports between 1998 and 2003. v. 1
The table illustrates data about the number of people travelling through the British airports, Heathrow, Gatwick and Stansted, over a period of six-years between 1998 and 2003. Overall, what stands out from the data is that the Gatwick airport and the Stansted showed only upward trends in the passenger traffic, whereas the Heathrow saw both increasing and decreasing trends in the given period. Another interesting point is that the Gatwik airport served more visitors at the start and at the end of the period. Looking at the detail, as regards to the Heathrow airport, the number of visitors in 1998 was 27. 2 million, and then the traffic increased gradually reaching 48. 2 million by the end of 2000, which is highest in the year 2000 among all the airports mentioned. Following this, over the next two years, the airport recorded a significant decline in the visitors reaching 33. 2 million in 2002. Finally, it increased rapidly to reach 45. 6 million at the end. If we look at the Stansted airport the trend was similar to the Heathrow until 2001 where it was used by 47. 3 million people. At this point, despite having a growth of over 25 million in the starting four years, it remained unchanged at 47. 3 million for two years till the end. By contrast, the Gatwick airport recorded 36. 5 million passengers in 1998 and attracted more visitors gradually till 2002, but this was followed by a rapid growth of passenger traffic in 2003 from 51. 1 million to 69. 3 million in one year.
The table illustrates data about the number of
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people
travelling through the British
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airports
, Heathrow, Gatwick and
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Stansted
, over a period of six-years between 1998 and 2003.

Overall
, what stands out from the data is that the Gatwick
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airport
and the
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Stansted
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showed
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only
upward trends in the passenger traffic, whereas the Heathrow
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saw
both increasing and decreasing trends in the
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given
period. Another interesting point is that the
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Gatwik
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airport
served more
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visitors
at the
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start
and at the
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end
of the period.

Looking at the detail, as regards to the Heathrow
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airport
, the number of
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visitors
in 1998 was 27. 2
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million
, and then the traffic increased
gradually
reaching 48. 2
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million
by the
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end
of 2000, which is highest in the
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year
2000 among all the
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airports
mentioned. Following this, over the
next
two years, the
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airport
recorded a significant decline in the
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visitors
reaching 33. 2
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million
in 2002.
Finally
, it increased
rapidly
to reach 45. 6
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million
at the
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end
. If we look at the
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Stansted
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airport
the trend was similar to the Heathrow until 2001 where it was
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used
by 47. 3
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million
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people
. At this point, despite having a growth of over 25
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million
in the starting four years, it remained unchanged at 47. 3
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million
for two years till the
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end
.

By contrast, the Gatwick
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airport
recorded 36. 5
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million
passengers in 1998 and attracted more
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visitors
gradually
till 2002,
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but
this
was followed
by a rapid growth of passenger traffic in 2003 from 51. 1
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million
to 69. 3
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million
in one
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year
.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The table highlights data on the number of travellers using three major british airports between 1998 and 2003. v. 1

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4 paragraphs
262 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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