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The chart below shows the number of travelers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.1

The chart below shows the number of travelers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000.
A number of languages have gone extinct over the last few decades. Although many individuals are of the opinion that it is critical to preserve each and every language, I believe that having only a few common languages will make our lives easier. Each language is unique to a culture and learning it is a great way to understand that culture. Also, languages create a sense of unity and belongings among people. For instance, whenever two individuals from the same country meet in a foreign place, they are excited to communicate in their native language. Obviously, language helps the bonding between people. On the other hand, in this age of globalization, it is highly beneficial to speak a common language in order to avoid confusion and facilitate effective communication. Using a link language like English has helped nations to come closer and increased trade and commerce among them. If we had not chosen a single language to communicate globally, even the advent of technology could not have helped us to achieve the kind of progress we have achieved now. Much like work experience, knowing a widely used language helps the career prospects of individuals. For example, nowadays, English is the medium of instruction in a number of schools all over the world. Even in countries where English is not the first or second language, there are English medium schools because people have realized that this language is the key to professional success. In conclusion, although it is important to save the languages from dying, it is not hard to see that a common language is in everyone’s interest. It boosts trade and commerce between countries and enhances the career prospects of individuals. Hence, in my opinion, the extinction of not so popular local languages is not a major cause for concern.
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Each
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is unique to a culture and learning it is a great way to understand that culture.
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create a sense of unity and belongings among
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people
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language
.
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On the other hand
, in this age of globalization, it is
highly
beneficial to speak a common
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language
in order to avoid confusion and facilitate effective communication. Using a link
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language
like English has
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helped
nations to
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closer and increased trade and commerce among them. If we had not chosen a single
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to communicate globally, even the advent of technology could not have
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helped
us to achieve the kind of progress we have achieved
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language
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the career prospects of
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.
For example
, nowadays, English is the medium of instruction in a number of schools all over the world. Even in countries where English is not the
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, there are English medium schools
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from dying, it is not
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to
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that a common
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is in everyone’s interest. It boosts trade and commerce between countries and enhances the career prospects of
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individuals
.
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popular local
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is not a major cause for concern.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The chart below shows the number of travelers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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