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The table describes in thousands the estimated and actual numbers of houses built in the UK by region in 2002. v.1

The table describes in thousands the estimated and actual numbers of houses built in the UK by region in 2002. v. 1
Dear sir or madam, I am writing this letter to request you to grant me an allowance to leave from work early on the 9th to 12th of April 2020. Let me illustrate further about the situation, it's my sister’s wedding, which is due next week on the given dates. Since it's a wedding there are heaps of work; for instance, organising, hosting and managing the event, and most of it is pending. Moreover, my father cannot handle everything by himself as he is diabetic and hypertensive, and so there is a strict regime that he need to follow and plus he is not allowed to take stress anytime at all. Therefore, in order to make things run smoothly I need to be there to handle all of this. Furthermore, my shift ends around 7 P. M, and thus it would extremely helpful if you could allow me leave by 5 p. m. In addition to this, the wedding is on the 11th of April and everything needs to sort out before that. Even though it's just two hours, but that would be sufficient enough to assist and manage the pending task. In my absence, my colleague Mr. Sadik Fumakiya would handle my assignments till the required time, and also he would contact me for daily report as well as inform if there are any emergencies. Additionally, I shall be working overtime to complete all the unfinished tasks. I hope you would understand my situation and take actions favourably. Thanking you. Yours sincerely, Shakib Qureshi
Dear sir or madam,

I am writing this letter to request you to grant me an allowance to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
from work early on the 9th to 12th of April 2020.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Let
me illustrate
further
about the situation, it's my sister’s wedding, which is due
next
week on the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
dates. Since it's a wedding there are heaps of work;
for instance
,
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organising
, hosting and managing the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
, and most of it is pending.
Moreover
, my father cannot handle everything by himself as he is diabetic and hypertensive, and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
there is a strict regime that he need to follow and plus he is not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
allowed
to take
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
anytime at all.
Therefore
, in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
things run
smoothly
I need to be there to handle all of this.

Furthermore
, my shift ends around 7 P. M, and
thus
it would
extremely
helpful if you could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
me
Please check whether 'to' is missing here (to allow to do something).
leave
by 5 p. m.
In addition
to this, the wedding is on the 11th of April and everything needs to sort out
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
that.
Even though
it's
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
two hours,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
that would be sufficient
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
to assist and manage the pending task.

In my absence, my colleague Mr.
Possible spelling mistake found.
Sadik
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Fumakiya
would handle my assignments till the required time, and
also
he would contact me for daily report
as well
as inform if there are any emergencies.
Additionally
, I shall be working overtime to complete all the unfinished tasks. I hope you would understand my situation and take actions
Possible spelling mistake found.
favourably
.

Thanking you.

Yours
sincerely
,

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Shakib
Qureshi
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay The table describes in thousands the estimated and actual numbers of houses built in the UK by region in 2002. v. 1

Essay
  American English
8 paragraphs
254 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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