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Some people think that new houses should be built in the same style as the older houses in the local area. Others disagree and say local authorities should allow people to build houses in the style of their own choice. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people think that new houses should be built in the same style as the older houses in the local area. Others disagree and say local authorities should allow people to build houses in the style of their own choice. v. 1
In recent times, a lot of discussion is going on regarding the design of houses. While some argue that they should be built in the same style as other older houses in the area, another set argue that the discision should be left to the owners. I totally agree on the latter side of the argument. One the one hand, some people argue that all homes in a locality should look like the same and hence any new construction should be of the same pattern as the existing ones. Although they belong to the current generation, they still want to keep an order in eveything. In a way, what they need is to have an equality between individuals so that every house, be it belongs to a poor or rich man, will look the same. Also, they dont want someone to feel bad seeing the palacious living of someone who is rich. Besides, they feel people who built their place long back should not feel bad for their old designs. For instance, all flats in Singapore are of the same pattern and majoroty of villas also follow this. On the other hand, another set of people believe that every citizen should have the right to choose and decide how their dream home ought to be and I completely agree on this. Even though it might affect the sentiments of a certain section of the society, it is totall unfair on the authorities part to force someone to live in an environment which they do not prefer. For example, a fairly rich person, who has earned the money planning to have a personal space according to his wish, should not be allowed not to follow his mind only to make others happy. Besides, majority have the capacity to built only one home and they should be allowed to fullfill and satisfy their ideas, where they have to stay rest of their lives. To conclude, each person has their own rights and no one should be forced to follow rules and regulations which are baseless and inappropriate. In my opinion, even if constructing buildings in same pattern is acceptable, it should not be made a mandate, there by forcing people to follow this in a strict manner.
In recent times,
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a lot of
discussion is going on regarding the design of
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houses
. While
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some
argue that they should
be built
in the same style as other older
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houses
in the area, another set argue that the
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discision
should be
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left
to the owners. I
totally
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agree
on the latter side of the argument.

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One
the one hand,
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some
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people
argue that all homes in a locality should look like the same and
hence
any new construction should be of the same pattern as the existing ones. Although they belong to the
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current
generation, they
still
want to
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keep
an order in
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eveything
. In a way, what they need is to have an equality between individuals
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so
that every
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house
, be it belongs to a poor or rich
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man
, will look the same.
Also
, they
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dont
want someone to feel
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bad
seeing the
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palacious
living of someone who is rich.
Besides
, they feel
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people
who built their place long back should not feel
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bad
for their
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old
designs.
For instance
, all flats in Singapore are of the same pattern and
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majoroty
of villas
also
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follow
this.

On the other hand
, another set of
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people
believe that every citizen should have the right to choose and decide how their dream home ought to be and I completely
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agree
on this.
Even though
it might affect the sentiments of a certain section of the society, it is
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totall
unfair on the authorities part to force someone to
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live
in an environment which they do not prefer.
For example
, a
fairly
rich person, who has earned the money planning to have a personal space according to his wish, should not be
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allowed
not to
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follow
his mind
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only
to
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make
others happy.
Besides
, majority have the capacity to built
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only
one
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home and
they should be
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allowed
to
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fullfill
and satisfy their
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ideas
, where they
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have to
stay rest of their
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lives
.

To conclude
, each person has their
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own
rights and no one should
be forced
to
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follow
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rules
and regulations which are baseless and inappropriate. In my opinion, even if constructing buildings in same pattern is acceptable, it should not
be made
a mandate, there by forcing
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people
to
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follow
this
Consider replacing "in a strict manner" with the adverb for "strict"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a strict manner
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that new houses should be built in the same style as the older houses in the local area. Others disagree and say local authorities should allow people to build houses in the style of their own choice. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
375 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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