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What book or film do you think portrays a country s culture the best Would you recommend it to a foreign friend who wishes to learn and understand that country Describe the book or film and explain why you would recommend it Use specific reasons and detai v.1

What book or film do you think portrays a country s culture the best Would you recommend it to a foreign friend who wishes to learn and understand that country Describe the book or film and explain why you would recommend it Use specific reasons and detai v. 1
Due to the impact of humans on the world’s ecosystem today there is such a problem as the extinction of variety and loss biodiversity. The distinct factors of this lie in pollution and habitat destruction, but clean energy as well as stop poaching could be viable ways of tackling these problems. First and foremost, the mass extinction entirely driven by human activity through climate changing and pollution. In other words, because of industrial emissions and agricultural activities affect the air pollution, land and water bodies throughout the world. Consequently, animals cannot exist with this conditions also eat unsuitable and contaminated products. However, this problem would be solved by government applying the new rules. This can be exemplified by the fact that limit actions of plants and factories thereby reducing the air emissions and waste. Furthermore, one added reason contributing to the problem of loss of environment is that illegal hunting. . It is undisputed that in the last years humanity contributed to a lost kind of animals. Moreover, use of animal material attracts leads poachers to crimes. Nevertheless, it is imperative that prompt measures are taken in order to deal with this issue. That is, humans are responsible for stop using natural resources and toughening punishment. This evidence clearly supports the idea that hunters must stop their activity. To sum up kill the animals illegally can be solved by government laws. In conclusion, disappearance of animals as result from air, land pollution and poaching through these problems might be coped with by new laws as well as reducing fauna’s resources.
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today
there is such a
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problem
as the extinction of variety and loss biodiversity. The distinct factors of this lie in
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pollution
and habitat destruction,
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but
clean energy
as well
as
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stop
poaching could be viable ways of tackling these problems.

First
and foremost, the mass extinction
entirely
driven by human activity through climate changing and
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pollution
.
In other words
,
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because
of industrial emissions and agricultural activities affect the air
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pollution
, land and water bodies throughout the world.
Consequently
,
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animals
cannot exist with
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this
conditions
also
eat unsuitable and contaminated products.
However
, this
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problem
would
be solved
by
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government
applying the new
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rules
. This can
be exemplified
by the fact that limit actions of plants and factories thereby reducing the air emissions and waste.

Furthermore
, one
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added
reason contributing to the
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problem
of loss of environment is that illegal hunting.
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.
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is undisputed
that in the last
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years
humanity contributed to a lost kind of
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animals
.
Moreover
,
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use
of
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animal
material attracts leads poachers to crimes.
Nevertheless
, it is imperative that prompt measures
are taken
in order to deal with this issue.
That is
, humans are responsible for
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stop
using natural resources and toughening punishment. This evidence
clearly
supports the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
that hunters
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must
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stop
their activity. To sum up kill the
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animals
illegally
can
be solved
by
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government
laws.

In conclusion
, disappearance of
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animals
as result from air, land
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pollution
and poaching through these
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problems
might
be coped
with by new laws
as well
as reducing fauna’s resources.
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IELTS essay What book or film do you think portrays a country s culture the best Would you recommend it to a foreign friend who wishes to learn and understand that country Describe the book or film and explain why you would recommend it Use specific reasons and detai v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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