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Some people think that new houses should be built in the same style as older houses in the local area Others disagree and say that local authorities should allow people to build houses in the style s of their own choice Discuss both view and give your own v.1

Some people think that new houses should be built in the same style as older houses in the local area Others disagree and say that local authorities should allow people to build houses in the style s of their own choice 1
Due to globalization, the world is getting closer and closer, and export of eatable items is one result of this phenomenon. Though, a fair amount of people finds eating of domestic food as more viable option for the environment safety of environment and better economy. I reckon, both sides of the above statement have their own pros and cons, which will be further discussed in this essay to find which one is better. On the one hand, the benefits of consumption of local food are directly connected to the financial and environmental status of the locality. Firstly, the farmers can save huge amount on the transportation and packaging, the cost of which they have to bear in case of exporting the food. For example, a person growing potatoes can directly sell them to the locals without any worries of storing them in cold storage and then paying the transport vehicle, too. Secondly, it will be good for nature, if we can reduce the pollution from vehicular activities by avoiding them. Thus, happy Mother Nature and pockets is a good result. On the other hand, eating only the domestic food can be detrimental to the citizen's health. As, we all are aware of the importance of a balanced diet, which means consumption of a variety of dishes to cover up the nutritional value. Thus, too much dependency on the local food will deprive us of that opportunity. A recent article published in New York Times, stated that many diseases are related to the dietary products which are consumed for too long. Therefore, people need to export and import the food from different places to have the variety and a healthy lifestyle. In conclusion, the export of food is about sharing the different nutritional values all over the world. However, avoiding this practice and consuming everything locally can benefit the economy and the nature at the same time. So, in my opinion, the advantages here slightly outweigh the disadvantages.
Due to globalization, the world is getting closer and closer, and export of eatable items is one result of this phenomenon. Though, a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fair
amount of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
finds eating of domestic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
as more viable option for the environment safety of environment and better economy. I reckon, both sides of the above statement have their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
pros and cons, which will be
further
discussed in this essay to find which one is better.

On the one hand, the benefits of consumption of local
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
are
directly
connected to the financial and environmental status of the locality.
Firstly
, the farmers can save huge amount on the transportation and packaging, the cost of which they
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
bear in case of exporting the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
.
For example
, a person growing potatoes can
directly
sell them to the locals without any worries of storing them in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cold
storage and then paying the transport vehicle, too.
Secondly
, it will be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
for nature, if we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the pollution from vehicular activities by avoiding them.
Thus
, happy Mother Nature and pockets is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
result.

On the other hand
, eating
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
the domestic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
can be detrimental to the citizen's health. As, we all are aware of the importance of a balanced diet, which means consumption of a variety of dishes to cover up the nutritional value.
Thus
, too much dependency on the local
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
will deprive us of that opportunity. A recent article published in New York Times, stated that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
diseases
are related
to the dietary products which
are consumed
for too long.
Therefore
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
need to export and import the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
from
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
places to have the variety and a healthy lifestyle.

In conclusion
, the export of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
is about sharing the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
nutritional values all over the world.
However
, avoiding this practice and consuming everything
locally
can benefit the economy and the nature at the same time.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, in my opinion, the advantages here
slightly
outweigh the disadvantages.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that new houses should be built in the same style as older houses in the local area Others disagree and say that local authorities should allow people to build houses in the style s of their own choice 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
327 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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