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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.36

Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. v. 36
It is frequently considered by some people, that students of all tertiary education degrees have to be permitted to select disciplines that they prefer, while others reckon that it is better them to study solely the subjects, which would be beneficial in their future lives. I take the view, that people should pay attention to improving subjects that they are good at. On the one hand, it really will reduce the time spent on studying the subject. This can be exemplified by people will educate that they really like; consequently, this will help concentrate and develop the subject as well as gain experience, while others try to be in time and learn everything a person can study the subject in depth in contrasting them. On the other hand, the result of the studied material may not be enough for full education, which clearly supports the idea that even though a person will be better in some area they not be notified on other fields. Nowadays, scrutiny the only one subject lacks, therefore besides need to know several industries. In the days of technology day by saying humanity require more specialists such as physical, scientific engineer and the like, while some people cannot surrender to this subject matter. Finally, in my view, current knowledge of only one subject is lacking due to future demand more in everything. Hereinafter, to work a person needs to be aware and qualified. To conclude, although some people feel that students must study what they want I absolutely convinced, that more education will result to great success.
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frequently
considered by
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some
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people
, that students of all tertiary education degrees
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have to
be permitted
to select disciplines that they prefer, while others reckon that it is better them to study
solely
the
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subjects
, which would be beneficial in their future
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lives
. I take the view, that
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people
should pay attention to improving
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subjects
that they are
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good
at.

On the one hand, it
really
will
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reduce
the time spent on studying the
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subject
. This can
be exemplified
by
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people
will educate that they
really
like;
consequently
, this will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
concentrate and develop the
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subject
as well
as gain experience, while others try to be in time and learn everything a person can study the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subject
in depth in contrasting them.

On the
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other
hand, the result of the studied material may not be
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enough
for full education, which
clearly
supports the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
that
even though
a person will be better in
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some
area they not
be notified
on
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other
fields. Nowadays, scrutiny the
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only
one
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subject
lacks,
therefore
besides
need to know several industries. In the days of technology day by saying humanity require more specialists such as physical, scientific engineer and the like, while
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
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people
cannot surrender to this
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "subject".
subject matter
.

Finally
, in my view,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
knowledge of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
one
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subject
is lacking due to future demand more in everything. Hereinafter, to work a person needs to be aware and qualified.

To conclude
, although
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some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
feel that students
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
study what they want I
absolutely
convinced, that more education will result to great success.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. v. 36

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
261 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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