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The table below shows the results of surveys in 2000, 2005 ad 2010 about one university. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.1

The table below shows the results of surveys in 2000, 2005 ad 2010 about one university.
The festival is one of the most important events for celebrating the life of joy, most people are especially gathering at this sort of stunning festival. Each country has its own religious festivals and celebrates the events with their following traditional path. I don’t think so people in the modern era tend to celebrate the events by themselves alone. I personally feel it is inappropriate reasons that most people have forgotten the traditional festival during the festival time. The following paragraphs will discuss the topic comprehensively. Celebrating the festival, which gives a strong positive vibe to people in the vicinity. People in the past, celebrated their festival by wishing people, had a fun chat with friends, made new friends as a family member, burning crackers and also got a blessing from their grandparents. The same tradition has been followed until now, but it has some modification which is adapted to modern society. To illustrate with an example, we are adding social media to our religious festival. So, people are now wishing and celebrating their festival online across the world. This method is not at all possible in the past. It doesn’t mean the people are forgetting their traditional festival, they are just modifying the way of celebrating. Moreover, in India, we have tons of religious festival which encourage people to know more about our traditional history and benefits. Particularly, I would say the “Pongal festival” which is celebrated as January in South India by people, especially “Tamilians”, the festival last for four-five days. Each day will have different activities. It is celebrated as thanksgiving days of sun, cow and farmers. The activities behind this celebration help us to understand the meaning of our religious festival. For example, on the first day of Pongal, we worship the sun god to thank him, on the next day we will conduct the famous bull sports activity called “jallikattu” to thank the cow for harvesting. So, each day is representing their own unique signature and also teach us why we are celebrating the events. Consequently, in my opinion, I strongly believe in celebrating the festival is not only for enthusiasm it brings the togetherness and showed love towards others. So, I think it is very important for everyone to celebrate their own festival passionately because it educates us greatly about the fact and history of religious festivals.
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festival
is one of the most
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important
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events
for
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celebrating
the life of joy, most
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people
are
especially
gathering at this sort of stunning
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festival
. Each country has its
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own
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religious
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festivals
and celebrates the
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events
with their following
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traditional
path. I don’t
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think
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so
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people
in the modern era tend to celebrate the
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events
by themselves alone. I
personally
feel it is inappropriate reasons that most
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people
have forgotten the
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traditional
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festival
during the
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festival
time. The following paragraphs will discuss the topic
comprehensively
.

Celebrating the
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festival
, which gives a strong
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positive
vibe to
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people
in the vicinity.
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People
in the past, celebrated their
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festival
by wishing
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people
, had a fun chat with friends, made new friends as a family member, burning crackers and
also
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got
a blessing from their grandparents. The same tradition has
been followed
until
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now
,
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but
it has
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some
modification which
is adapted
to modern society. To illustrate with an example, we are adding social media to our
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religious
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festival
.
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So
,
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people
are
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now
wishing and
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celebrating
their
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festival
online across the world. This method is not at all possible in the past. It doesn’t mean the
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people
are forgetting their
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traditional
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festival
, they are
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just
modifying the way of celebrating.

Moreover
, in India, we have tons of
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religious
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festival
which encourage
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people
to know more about our
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traditional
history and benefits.
Particularly
, I would say the “
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Pongal
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festival”
which
is celebrated
as January in South India by
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people
,
especially
“
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Tamilians
”, the
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festival
last for four-five days. Each day will have
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different
activities. It
is celebrated
as thanksgiving days of sun, cow and farmers. The activities behind this celebration
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help
us to understand the meaning of our
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religious
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festival
.
For example
, on the
first
day of
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Pongal
, we worship the sun god to thank him, on the
next
day we will conduct the
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famous
bull sports activity called “
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jallikattu
” to thank the cow for harvesting.
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So
, each day is representing their
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own
unique signature and
also
teach us why we are
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celebrating
the
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events
.

Consequently
, in my opinion, I
strongly
believe in
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celebrating
the
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festival
is not
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only
for enthusiasm it brings the togetherness and
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showed
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love
towards others.
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So
, I
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think
it is
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very
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important
for everyone to celebrate their
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own
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festival
passionately
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because
it educates us
greatly
about the fact and history of
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religious
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festivals
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay The table below shows the results of surveys in 2000, 2005 ad 2010 about one university.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
393 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
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