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The graph below shows the number of visitors to three museums between 2000 and 2005 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.1

The graph below shows the number of visitors to three museums between 2000 and 2005
In this modern era, the technology giving so many discoveries for humans to reduce their workload, where most of the things get a great welcome by users and eco-friendly for the environment. But some items like plastic bags are more useful than others, it is a huge threat to the environment, which includes every life. In fact, the used plastics, the electronic rubbish cannot be disposed of with this same modern technology. I largely agree that people are also making the environment as dustbin without any think about the future. Firstly, people are using products whichever is into the market without any knowledge about the pros and cons of that particular product. They will not ask for any information about the product, only it should be attractive and useful. With this similar attitude, the products like plastic bags are introduced and once we used only know that it cannot be destroyed. Due to this, at present, the environment is full of used plastic bags as wastage and these bags are harmful to human health. For example, a recent study by the University of New York, which tell that excess used plastic as waste in society brings cancer to humans. Secondly, in a survey, one- fourth of the world population is uneducated, there don't know to use a product properly with all precaution to dispose of it. Moreover, the government should have a particular department to check the new introducing product before it enters the market, at least they should have a technology to solve any problem related to the environment or human health. In addition, the authority of the state can get strong rules and regulation to dispose of wastage properly from home. For instance, the degradable and non-degradable products can be separated in home and get into public garbage. To conclude, people should be more aware of society and try to put their hands together to keep clean and tidy, at least around the place where they live. The government should also properly guide them to achieve an eco-friendly environment.
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get
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environment
.
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some
items like
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plastic
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are more useful than others, it is a huge threat to the
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environment
, which includes every life. In fact, the
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used
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plastics
, the electronic rubbish cannot
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people
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environment
as dustbin without any
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think
about the future.

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,
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are using
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whichever is into the market without any knowledge about the pros and cons of that particular
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product
. They will not
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ask for
any information about the
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it should be attractive and useful. With this similar attitude, the
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products
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plastic
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bags
are introduced
and once we
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used
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only
know that it cannot be
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destroyed
. Due to this, at present, the
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environment
is full of
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used
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plastic
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bags
as wastage and these
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bags
are harmful to human health.
For example
, a recent study by the University of New York, which
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as waste in society brings cancer to humans.

Secondly
, in a survey, one- fourth of the world population
is uneducated
, there don't know to
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use
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product
properly
with all precaution to dispose of it.
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, the
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government
should have a particular department to
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check
the new introducing
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product
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before
it enters the market, at least they should have a technology to solve any problem related to the
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environment
or human health.
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, the authority of the state can
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get
strong
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rules
and regulation to dispose of wastage
properly
from home.
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, the degradable and non-degradable
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products
can
be separated
in home and
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get
into public garbage.

To conclude
,
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people
should be more aware of society and try to put their hands together to
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keep
clean and tidy, at least around the place where they
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live
. The
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government
should
also
properly
guide them to achieve an eco-friendly
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environment
.
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IELTS essay The graph below shows the number of visitors to three museums between 2000 and 2005

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
341 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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