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The graph below shows the total value of exports and the value of fuel, food and manufactured goods exported by one country from 2000 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.1

The graph below shows the total value of exports and the value of fuel, food and manufactured goods exported by one country from 2000 to 2005.
The line graphs depict the trends of how much a petrol, eatables and good are produced by one nation and transmitted to the other nation between the period 2000 and 2005. Overall, it can be clearly vivid that the total value of petrol fall in the year 2002 as compared the previous span, but over the period 2002 the entire rate of fuel increased rapidly over the time. Meanwhile, the worth of material has fallen slightly. Whereas, the export of food has fluctuated considerably. In the cycle of 2000, the total rate of fossil fuel exported to other nations was 3, 00, 000 and it is falling slightly from 50, 000 in the 2002 time, but after twelve months the amount of total exports of petrol rise dramatically and reached for the nearly price of 4, 50, 000 in the year 2005. On the other hand, there was a decline of fuel in every period starting from nearly 50, 000 to 30, 000 in just 365 days and slowly it is felled down to 20, 000 in 2005. Coming to the meal exported, there is a variation in the amount of food exported every year compared to the petrol exports. In 2000, roughly fifteen million cuisines are exported and in 2001 and 2002 it is increased by ten thousand while in 2003 it was decreased to 20000 million and from 2003 the cost of eatables exported increased slightly. Similarly, also value of goods produced is going under fluctuation compared to the meat and less profit of the good is exported over the time contrast to crude oil and foodstuff. In the era of 2000, 2004 and 2005 roughly only 3000 goods were exported and from 2001 to 2003 there is slightly fluctuation.
The line graphs depict the trends of how much a
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petrol
, eatables and
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good
are produced
by one nation and transmitted to the other nation between the period 2000 and 2005.

Overall
, it can be
clearly
vivid that the total value of
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petrol
fall in the year 2002 as compared the previous span,
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but
over the period 2002 the entire rate of fuel increased
rapidly
over the time. Meanwhile, the worth of material has fallen
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slightly
.
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Whereas
, the export of food has fluctuated
considerably
.

In the cycle of 2000, the total rate of fossil fuel
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exported
to other nations was 3, 00, 000 and it is falling
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slightly
from 50, 000 in the 2002 time,
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but
after twelve months the amount of total exports of
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petrol
rise
dramatically
and reached for the
nearly
price of 4, 50, 000 in the year 2005.
On the other hand
, there was a decline of fuel in every period starting from
nearly
50, 000 to 30, 000 in
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just
365 days and
slowly
it
is felled
down to 20, 000 in 2005.

Coming to the meal
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exported
, there is a variation in the amount of food
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exported
every year compared to the
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petrol
exports. In 2000, roughly fifteen million cuisines are
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exported
and in 2001 and 2002 it
is increased
by ten thousand while in 2003 it
was decreased
to 20000 million and from 2003 the cost of eatables
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exported
increased
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slightly
.
Similarly
,
also
value of
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goods
produced is going under fluctuation compared to the meat and less profit of the
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good
is
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exported
over the time contrast to crude oil and foodstuff. In the era of 2000, 2004 and 2005 roughly
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only
3000
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goods
were
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exported
and from 2001 to 2003 there is
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slightly
fluctuation.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay The graph below shows the total value of exports and the value of fuel, food and manufactured goods exported by one country from 2000 to 2005.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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