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You have organised 90th birthday party of your relative and invited elderly guests also. It was a successful party. Write a letter to the hotel manager, to provide the feedback: In your letter, you should tell: • when the party was • why it was s v.1

You have organised 90th birthday party of your relative and invited elderly guests also. It was a successful party. Write a letter to the hotel manager, to provide the feedback: In your letter, you should tell: • when the party was • why it was s v. 1
During the process of becoming adult, teenagers and their parents face with an issue of misunderstanding and a problem of disagreements between each other keenly feels. Awareness around this problem is increasing incrementally, as society is divided into two groups. A number of people claim that such clashes within families is a pivotal process for teenagers, since they cement their styles of living and life views; however another part of the community maintains that it is harmful for both sides and should be removed immediately. From my perspective, conflicts are paramount part of growing, as it could benefit on children’s prospective growth. First, the appearance of an opposite viewpoint between parents and their children, especially teenagers, are inevitable, as everyone tends to have own opinion and in case of contrast, disagreement occurs. , this stage of adolescence life is crucial, since teenagers develop their own opinions and train their critical thinking when tackling sophisticated problems. For example, conflicts between parents and teenagers arise from parents’ decisions about what is best for their children or worse, instead of giving that chance to youth, as it happens in religious families. Let us consider that parents are representatives of a particular religion and generally they force children to keep traditions, do not take into account their interests. Although, teenagers are a very emotional and usually they just voice their opinions and after that conflict occurs, they educate willpower. On the other hand, people are concentrating on the negative consequences of family disagreements and think that conflicts in teen ages are extremely dangerous. Because, first of all, high level of sensitiveness coupled with disagreements can cause some psychological illnesses or disorders. In addition, teenagers in this stage of life are more emotional and take everything close to their hearts; therefore, they could hurt themselves physically. For instance, a number of teenagers committing suicide, because of problems in the family increased incrementally in recent years. Thus, in order to mitigate adolescents’ lives, some people claim that conflicts should be avoided. Admittedly, conflicts at home are unavoidable. Hence, another important point is that teenagers should improve their viewpoints and formulate their own style of living, since they will probably have more serious problems and clashes. Eventually, “practice makes perfect”, teenagers could have experience in problem solving and in the near future, they will be able to use them in rectifying the issues. By the way of conclusion, conflicts between parents and adolescents have their own advantages and disadvantages; nevertheless, in my opinion, the benefits outweigh drawbacks, as it gives a number of opportunities for teenagers to base their adult life properly.
During the process of becoming adult,
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teenagers
and their
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parents
face with an issue of misunderstanding and a
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problem
of
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disagreements
between each other
keenly
feels. Awareness around this
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problem
is increasing
incrementally
, as society
is divided
into two groups. A number of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
claim that such clashes within
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families
is a pivotal process for
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teenagers
, since they cement their styles of living and
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life
views;
however
another part of the community maintains that it is harmful for both sides and should
be removed
immediately. From my perspective,
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conflicts
are paramount part of growing, as it could benefit on
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children’s
prospective growth.

First
, the appearance of an opposite viewpoint between
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parents
and their
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children
,
especially
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teenagers
, are inevitable, as everyone tends to have
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own
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opinion
and in case of contrast,
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disagreement
occurs.
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,
this stage of adolescence
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life
is crucial, since
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teenagers
develop their
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own
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opinions
and train their critical thinking when tackling sophisticated
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problems
.
For example
,
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conflicts
between
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parents
and
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teenagers
arise from
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parents’
decisions about what is best for their
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children
or worse,
instead
of giving that chance to youth, as it happens in religious
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families
.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Let
us consider that
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parents
are representatives of a particular religion and
generally
they force
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children
to
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keep
traditions, do not take into account their interests. Although,
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teenagers
are a
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very
emotional and
usually
they
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just
voice their
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opinions
and after that
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conflict
occurs, they educate willpower.

On the other hand
,
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people
are concentrating on the
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negative
consequences of
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family
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disagreements
and
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think
that
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conflicts
in teen ages are
extremely
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dangerous
.
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Because
,
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first of all
, high level of sensitiveness coupled with
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disagreements
can cause
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some
psychological illnesses or disorders.
In addition
,
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teenagers
in this stage of
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life
are more emotional and take everything close to their hearts;
therefore
, they could hurt themselves
physically
.
For instance
, a number of
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teenagers
committing suicide,
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because
of
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problems
in the
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family
increased
incrementally
in recent years.
Thus
, in order to mitigate adolescents’
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
,
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some
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people
claim that
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conflicts
should
be avoided
.

Admittedly
,
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conflicts
at home are unavoidable.
Hence
, another
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important
point is that
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teenagers
should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
their viewpoints and formulate their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
style of living, since they will
probably
have more serious
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problems
and clashes.
Eventually
, “practice
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makes
perfect”,
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teenagers
could have experience in
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problem
solving and in the near future, they will be able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
them in rectifying the issues.

By the way of conclusion,
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conflicts
between
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parents
and adolescents have their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
advantages and disadvantages;
nevertheless
, in my
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opinion
, the benefits outweigh drawbacks, as it gives a number of opportunities for
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teenagers
to base their adult
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life
properly
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay You have organised 90th birthday party of your relative and invited elderly guests also. It was a successful party. Write a letter to the hotel manager, to provide the feedback: In your letter, you should tell: • when the party was • why it was s v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
435 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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