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the table below shows the proportion of income adults and children spent on four common categories in the UK in 1998 v.1

the table below shows the proportion of income adults and children spent on four common categories in the UK in 1998 v. 1
Not many students have a chance to study at University while living with their family. Due to many factors, most of the students get their higher education being away from their friends and family. Is it beneficial to be away from home in pursuit of education, is the question for some people. This essay describes the disadvantages of this concern. Firstly, The autonomy of students may lead to addictive habits, which is potentially dangerous for health. Most of the freshmen in the Universities are in their late teens, and this is also an age where they would like to explore their life. Some of the students try new things, and due to the hype and wrong friendships, school pass outs may get addicted to drugs in their early University years. According to the Federal Bureau of Investigation, Most of the drug peddlers are active in the University towns. The parents must have frequent visits to the students dorms and apartments while their son or daughter's tenure at the University, to prevent such issues. Secondly, the pupils of the University may get overwhelmed with the number of classes and may choose menial jobs over a career with better prospects. According to the article published in New York Times, The drop rate of University students is alarmingly high in past five years. The author attributes it to the lack of competency for the growing technical jobs. Had it been the case, where they had support and guidance of parents, such youth could have made better career choices. Finally, staying with parents while studying has a lot of advantages. Not only they provide their kids with the best guidance, but also keep in check to keep away from bad practices. However, the parenthood and the ethics they inculcate from childhood remain an important aspect.
Not
many
students
have a chance to study at
University
while living with their family. Due to
many
factors, most of the
students
get
their higher education being away from their friends and family. Is it beneficial to be away from home in pursuit of education, is the question for
some
people
. This essay
describes
the disadvantages of this concern.

Firstly
, The autonomy of
students
may lead to addictive habits, which is
potentially
dangerous
for health. Most of the freshmen in the
Universities
are in their late teens, and this is
also
an age where they would like to explore their life.
Some of the
students
try new things, and due to the hype and
wrong
friendships, school pass outs may
get
addicted to drugs in their early
University
years. According to the Federal Bureau of Investigation, Most of the drug peddlers are active in the
University
towns. The parents
must
have frequent visits to the
students
dorms and apartments while their son or daughter's tenure at the
University
, to
prevent
such issues.

Secondly
, the pupils of the
University
may
get
overwhelmed with the number of classes and may choose menial jobs over a career with better prospects. According to the article published in New York Times, The drop rate of
University
students
is
alarmingly
high in past five years. The author attributes it to the lack of competency for the growing technical jobs. Had it been the case, where they had support and guidance of parents, such youth could have made better career choices.

Finally
, staying with parents while studying has
a lot of
advantages. Not
only
they provide their kids with the best guidance,
but
also
keep
in
check
to
keep
away from
bad
practices.
However
, the parenthood and the ethics they inculcate from childhood remain an
important
aspect.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay the table below shows the proportion of income adults and children spent on four common categories in the UK in 1998 v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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