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the bar chart below shows the number of girls per 100 boys enrolled in different levels of school education v.1

the bar chart below shows the number of girls per 100 boys enrolled in different levels of school education v. 1
Yes, It is true that television is a big part of the many people. However, satellite box is not a part of my life philosophy. However, everything what interests me is possible to find on the other electronic devices, because of that I don't see in today world TV as only digital media. Nowadays, many people can't imagine a world without TVs and they will present it with all pros rather cons. Although, essay will present both sides. First of all, nobody can confirm what is good or bad for the other person and the same is with this essay theses that for me is good television. As an example, I can tell that I am not possessed TV set more than 10 years, what means that I can have different lifestyles. However, as a disadvantage of watching television screen is constantly pushing the ads. Unlikely, they are psychologically used as a manipulative objet to push people spend more on unnecessary things. Secondly, sometimes is good to watch a relaxing movie, documentary or sport. The digital box is possible to shear on different devices, which allowing as better movement and possibilities to watching interesting programs wherever we are. Also at an advantage some TV providers, allowing to explicitly to make a custom list of our interests. As a conclusion, in some occasions, digital media can have a positive impact on me. Although, if we are using screen reasonable time, without addiction, is good to have a one. Unfortunately, I can confirm that every type of media more often has inappropriate or uninteresting program rather something interested and what can bring more advantage in my life.
Yes, It is true that television is a
big
part of the
many
people
.
However
, satellite box is not a part of my life philosophy.
However
, everything what interests me is possible to find on the other electronic devices,
because
of that I don't
see
in
today
world TV as
only
digital media. Nowadays,
many
people
can't imagine a world without
TVs and
they will present it with all pros
rather
cons.
Although
, essay will present both sides.

First of all
, nobody can confirm what is
good
or
bad
for the other person and the same is with this essay theses that for me is
good
television. As an example, I can
tell
that I am not possessed TV set more than 10 years, what means that I can have
different
lifestyles.
However
, as a disadvantage of watching television screen is
constantly
pushing the ads. Unlikely, they are
psychologically
used
as a manipulative
objet
to push
people
spend more on unnecessary things.

Secondly
,
sometimes is
good
to
watch
a relaxing movie, documentary or sport. The digital box is possible to shear on
different
devices, which allowing as better movement and possibilities to watching interesting programs wherever we are.
Also
at an advantage
some
TV providers, allowing to
explicitly
to
make
a custom list of our interests.

As a conclusion, in
some
occasions, digital media can have a
positive
impact on me. Although, if we are using screen reasonable time, without addiction, is
good
to have a one. Unfortunately, I can confirm that every type of media more
often
has inappropriate or uninteresting program
rather
something interested and what can bring more advantage in my life.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay the bar chart below shows the number of girls per 100 boys enrolled in different levels of school education v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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