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Task 1: You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compari v.1

Task 1: The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999.
One of the major concerns all over the world is whether the agricultural sector can meet the growing demand for food worldwide. This issue is caused due to two main causes – the ever increasing population and extreme changes in climatic conditions. However, it can be resolved through appropriate measures. The growing demand for food is caused by the ever increasing population. Actually, over the last 50 years, there was a drastic increase in human population. In fact, world population is expected to increase from 7. 9 billion in 2017 to 9. 7 billion by 2050. Unfortunately, food production has not kept pace with. Climatic changes happening due to various reasons like depletion of ozone layer, acid rain and global warming have led to a decrease in the production of food. However, this situation could be remedied by farmers by increasing the area under cultivation and by using improved farming techniques. For example, yield can be increased by using quality fertilizers, improved methods of irrigation and modern techniques called precision farming. In addition to this, the government needs to take active participation in educating farmers about the use of such techniques and products. The international community also needs to step in. Countries where food is surplus must show the willingness to export it to poor countries at a nominal price. This will ensure that everyone irrespective of their financial situation or nationality has access to three square meals a day. In conclusion, though population is increasing and climatic changes have damaged the current supply of food by using improved farming techniques and bringing more area under cultivation, food production can be stimulated.
One of the major concerns all over the world is whether the agricultural sector can
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meet
the growing demand for
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food
worldwide. This issue
is caused
due to two main causes
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–
the ever
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increasing
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population
and extreme
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changes
in climatic conditions.
However
, it can
be resolved
through appropriate measures.

The growing demand for
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food
is caused
by the ever
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increasing
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population
. Actually, over the last 50 years, there was a drastic increase in human
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population
. In fact, world
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population
is
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expected
to increase from 7. 9 billion in 2017 to 9. 7 billion by 2050. Unfortunately,
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food
production has not
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kept
pace with. Climatic
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changes
happening due to various reasons like depletion of ozone layer, acid rain and global warming have led to a decrease in the production of food.

However
, this situation could
be remedied
by farmers by
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increasing
the area under cultivation and by using
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improved
farming
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techniques
.
For example
, yield can
be increased
by using quality fertilizers,
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improved
methods of irrigation and modern
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techniques
called precision farming.
In addition
to this, the
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government
needs to take active participation in educating farmers about the
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use
of such
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techniques
and products. The international community
also
needs to step in. Countries where
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food
is surplus
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must
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show
the willingness to export it to poor countries at a nominal price. This will ensure that everyone irrespective of their financial situation or nationality has access to three square meals a day.

In conclusion
, though
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population
is
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increasing
and climatic
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changes
have damaged the
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current
supply of
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food
by using
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improved
farming
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techniques
and bringing more area under cultivation,
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food
production can
be stimulated
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Task 1: The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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