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The table below provides information on rental charges and salaries in three areas of London Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below You should write at least 150 words v.1

The table below provides information on rental charges and salaries in three areas of London Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below v. 1
A successful professional progress rests on the basic educational foundation one receives. Many people believe youngsters should give equal importance to all subjects, whereas another section believes the focus should be on subjects that are interesting to them. But the big question is whether they are matured or wise enough to choose? On the one hand, students should be given enough guidance to distinguish subjects that they can really make a successful life out of. So, vocational course is a solution to take them through many career options at this stage without ignoring subjects which are not so interesting for them at this stage. This option will help them to comprehend the practical aspects of a job or will provide information on what they can really expect in the real time world starting with; which professional course to choose, mode of work, expected remuneration’s and so on. For instance, as per the National Education Council's report, vocational schools are helping major percentage of students to opt for occupation other than traditionally chosen one, like Engineering or Medicine. On the other hand, the present curriculum does not allow students to ignore certain languages, history or geography subjects. Even though, these topics may be boring as well as not so useful in their work life for many, a mandatory compulsion is there to score an overall high mark that helps them for further study. Also, lack of proper career guidance in schools does not make the situation any better to be choosy. As a result, the majority of engineering graduates are not preferred in the same field in which they are qualified for, because of the lack of quality they possess. As per the industry report, this is the outcome of students opting for their stream of study not on their own but under parental pressure. To summarize, the argument put forth above clearly vindicates that, students should be guided properly at their maturing age to select a job that they will cherish for life.
Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply "successful professional progress".
A successful professional progress
rests on the basic educational foundation one receives.
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Many
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people
believe youngsters should give equal importance to all
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subjects
, whereas another section believes the focus should be on
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subjects
that are interesting to them.
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But
the
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big
question is whether they
are matured
or wise
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enough
to choose?

On the one hand,
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students
should be
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given
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enough
guidance to distinguish
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subjects
that they can
really
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make
a successful life out of.
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So
, vocational course is a solution to take them through
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many
career options at this stage without ignoring
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subjects
which are not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
interesting for them at this stage. This option will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
them to comprehend the practical aspects of a job or will provide information on what they can
really
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expect
in the real time world starting with; which professional course to choose, mode of work,
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expected
remuneration’s and
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so
on.
For instance
, as per the National Education Council's report, vocational schools are helping major percentage of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
to opt for occupation other than
traditionally
chosen one, like Engineering or Medicine.

On the other hand
, the present curriculum does not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ignore
certain languages, history or geography
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subjects
.
Even though
, these topics may be boring
as well
as not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
useful in their work life for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
, a mandatory compulsion is there to score an
overall
high mark that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
them for
further
study.
Also
, lack of proper career guidance in schools does not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the situation any better to be choosy.
As a result
, the majority of engineering graduates are not preferred in the same field in which they
are qualified
for,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of the lack of quality they possess. As per the industry report, this is the outcome of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
opting for their stream of study not on their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
under parental pressure.

To summarize
, the argument put forth above
clearly
vindicates that,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
should
be guided
properly
at their maturing age to select a job that they will cherish for life.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay The table below provides information on rental charges and salaries in three areas of London Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
333 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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