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Do you think consumer should avoid over packed products or it is responsibility of product producers to avoid extra packaging of products. v.1

Do you think consumer should avoid over packed products or it is responsibility of product producers to avoid extra packaging of products. v. 1
Climate change is one of the biggest concerns of the 21st century. It is a clear threat to the survival of humanity. Since it is a global cause, all the countries in the world should share the responsibility. Some people argue that, primarily, developed countries must play a major role to solve the issue; however, others believe that third world countries should take the burden of environmental changes. Regardless of both views, it is an equal responsibility of the international community to come up with solutions to global warming. However, developed countries have more resources and skills to work towards the solution. The western world should lead the campaign against global warming and the developing countries must do their share. It is a common goal with common interests, therefore, every country in the world should play their role to save the universe. It is a fact that developing countries are blamed for most of the pollution that leads to environmental disasters. In my view, instead of getting into the blame game, the world should work together to achieve their targets. Poor countries should control the causes of pollution, such as emissions from their industries, overpopulation, and destruction of forests. If we work together as citizens of the universe, we can bring positive changes to our atmosphere. In conclusion, we must take collective action to eradicate the causes of global warming. We still have time to take action, but little more late can be too late. Countries should join their hands to make the world a better place for coming generations.
Climate
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change
is one of the biggest concerns of the 21st century. It is a
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clear
threat to the survival of humanity. Since it is a
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global
cause, all the
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countries
in the
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world
should share the responsibility.
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Some
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people
argue that,
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, developed
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countries
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must
play a major role to solve the issue;
however
, others believe that third
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world
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countries
should take the burden of environmental
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changes
.

Regardless of both views, it is an equal responsibility of the international community to
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come
up with solutions to
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global
warming.
However
, developed
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countries
have more resources and
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skills
to work towards the solution. The western
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world
should lead the campaign against
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global
warming and the developing
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countries
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must
do their share. It is a common goal with common interests,
therefore
, every
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country
in the
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world
should play their role to save the universe.

It is a fact that developing
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countries
are blamed
for most of the pollution that leads to environmental disasters. In my view,
instead
of getting into the blame game, the
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world
should work together to achieve their targets. Poor
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countries
should control the causes of pollution, such as emissions from their industries, overpopulation, and destruction of forests. If we work together as citizens of the universe, we can bring
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positive
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changes
to our atmosphere.

In conclusion
, we
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must
take collective action to eradicate the causes of
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global
warming. We
still
have time to take action,
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but
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little
more late can be too late.
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Countries
should
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join
their hands to
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make
the
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world
a better place for coming generations.
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IELTS essay Do you think consumer should avoid over packed products or it is responsibility of product producers to avoid extra packaging of products. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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