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The table below gives information about UK independent films. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.1

The table below gives information about UK independent films.
Many students of poor nations are travelling in developed nations in order to seek better education and employment opportunities. This essay will discuss that developed countries are not stealing skilled manpower of poor countries and the ways people could be motivated to settle in their own country. In my view, people from developing countries have specific reasons to migrate to other countries, so these nations cannot be blamed for this trend. First of all, students make their own decision whether to study abroad or not. In other words, graduates aren’t compelled to move abroad rather than they are given the choice of freedom to decide whether they choose to stay or leave their motherland. So, a country cannot be blamed for immigrants who make their own choice. Secondly, developed countries are providing opportunities for people of poor countries to be more skillful. A lot of students decide to move abroad temporarily in order to pursue good standard of education. After completing certain qualifications, these people are equipped with sets of handful skill and education which can be utilized when they return to their own country. To illustrate this, my friend studied web development in Canada 3 years ago and now, he has established his own IT organization to offer web services. However, various methods can be implemented to encourage people to stay within their home country. One measure is to provide more employment opportunities for students. Many graduates often move to rich countries in order to seek better job opportunities. If people are employed after completion of their education, this could motivate people to never leave their country territory. Another effective method could be the rise in remuneration. In developing nations, pay rate per hour is too low in figures. Hence, people cannot achieve quality of life which encourages them to move abroad for better life. So, if the government offers suitable amount of salary, people will no longer need to seek employment in other countries. In conclusion, there are clear reasons that rich countries are not stealing skilled manpower and there are various options that can be adapted to avoid people from leaving their home country.
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Many
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students
of poor
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nations
are travelling in developed
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nations
in order to seek better
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education
and employment
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opportunities
. This essay will discuss that developed
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countries
are not stealing skilled manpower of poor
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countries
and the ways
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people
could
be motivated
to settle in their
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own
country.

In my view,
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people
from developing
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countries
have specific reasons to migrate to other
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countries
,
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so
these
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nations
cannot
be blamed
for this trend.
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First of all
,
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students
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make
their
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own
decision whether to study
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abroad
or not.
In other words
, graduates aren’t compelled to
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move
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abroad
rather
than they are
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given
the choice of freedom to decide whether they choose to stay or
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leave
their motherland.
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So
, a
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country
cannot
be blamed
for immigrants who
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make
their
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own
choice.
Secondly
, developed
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countries
are providing
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opportunities
for
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people
of poor
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countries
to be more skillful.
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A lot of
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students
decide to
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move
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abroad
temporarily
in order to pursue
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good
standard of
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education
. After completing certain qualifications, these
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people
are equipped
with sets of handful
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skill
and
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education
which can
be utilized
when they return to their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
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country
. To illustrate this, my friend studied web development in Canada 3 years ago and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
, he has established his
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
IT organization to offer web services.

However
, various methods can
be implemented
to encourage
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people
to stay within their home
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country
. One measure is to provide more employment
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opportunities
for
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students
.
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Many
graduates
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often
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move
to rich
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countries
in order to seek better job
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opportunities
. If
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people
are employed
after completion of their
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education
, this could motivate
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people
to never
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leave
their
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country
territory. Another effective method could be the rise in remuneration. In developing
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nations
, pay rate per hour is too low in figures.
Hence
,
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people
cannot achieve quality of life which encourages them to
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move
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abroad
for better life.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, if the
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government
offers suitable amount of salary,
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people
will no longer need to seek employment in other countries.

In conclusion
, there are
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clear
reasons that rich
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countries
are not stealing skilled manpower and there are various options that can
be adapted
to avoid
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people
from leaving their home
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country
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
47Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay The table below gives information about UK independent films.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
357 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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