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Smoking is not only harm the smoker, but also those who nearby. Therefore, smoking should be baned in public places. To what extent do you agre or disagree? v.1

Smoking is not only harm the smoker, but also those who nearby. Therefore, smoking should be baned in public places. v. 1
Indirect smoking can have a fatal symptom as much as direct smoking. As a result of this, some people claims that the public smoking should be banned. In my opinion, I completely agree with this claim. People can be harmed physically from inhaling toxic smokes in public places; public ban seems only option to prevent non-smokers. If the country banned the smoking at public places, people can inhale fresh air and can enjoy clean atmosphere. Therefore, for the non-smoker’s health issues, it is reasonable to ban the public smoking. However, against ban with the public smoking have several reasons. First and foremost reason, smokers have not had a place to smoke anywhere else in the world if the public smoking is banned. Secondly, it would be reasonable to build more of smoking booths in public areas before banning smokers. Without installation of relevant facilities mean forcing smokers to quit the smoking and which are impossible to achieve. Therefore, just banning the public smoking is unrealistic and unreasonable. In my opinion, public smoking should be banned regardless the consequences of smokers. The health risks for non-smokers are worth considering for; because they have to inhale the toxic smoking is bad as direct smoking. By inhaling a bi of smokes from other smokers in public areas, non-smokers may face the fatal diseases such as lungs and heart cancers. For example, 60% of US people diagnosis the symptom of smokers due to indirect smoking. Even though the smokers claim about the insufficient places to smoke, the health of non-smokers is more important. Hence, the public smoking ban should be preceded. In conclusion, the public booths sound practical and reasonable before banning the public smoking. However, the physical influences by indirect smoking are more damaging to non-smokers before the operating of public booths. Therefore, banning the public smoking would be the only possibility to secure non-smoker’s health.
Indirect
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can have a fatal symptom as much as direct
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smoking
.
As a result
of this,
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some
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people
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claims
that the
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public
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smoking
should be
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banned
. In my opinion, I completely
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agree
with this claim.

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can
be harmed
physically
from inhaling toxic
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smokes
in
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public
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places
;
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public
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ban
seems
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only
option to
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prevent
non-smokers. If the country
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banned
the
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smoking
at
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public
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places
,
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people
can inhale fresh air and can enjoy clean atmosphere.
Therefore
, for the non-smoker’s
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health
issues, it is reasonable to
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ban
the
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public
smoking.

However
, against
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ban
with the
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public
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smoking
have several reasons.
First
and foremost reason, smokers have not had a
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place
to
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smoke
anywhere else in the world if the
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public
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smoking
is
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banned
.
Secondly
, it would be reasonable to build more of
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smoking
booths in
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public
areas
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before
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banning
smokers. Without installation of relevant facilities mean forcing smokers to quit the
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smoking
and which are impossible to achieve.
Therefore
,
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just
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banning
the
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public
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smoking
is unrealistic and unreasonable.

In my opinion,
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public
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smoking
should be
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banned
regardless the consequences of smokers. The
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health
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risks
for non-smokers are worth considering for;
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because
they
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have to
inhale the toxic
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is
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bad
as direct
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smoking
. By inhaling a bi of
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smokes
from other smokers in
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public
areas, non-smokers may face the fatal diseases such as lungs and heart cancers.
For example
, 60% of US
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people
diagnosis the symptom of smokers due to indirect
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smoking
.
Even though
the smokers claim about the insufficient
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places
to
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smoke
, the
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health
of non-smokers is more
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important
.
Hence
, the
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public
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smoking
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ban
should
be preceded
.

In conclusion
, the
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public
booths sound practical and reasonable
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before
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banning
the
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public
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smoking
.
However
, the physical influences by indirect
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smoking
are more damaging to non-smokers
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before
the operating of
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public
booths.
Therefore
,
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banning
the
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public
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would be the
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only
possibility to secure non-smoker’s
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health
.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
57Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Smoking is not only harm the smoker, but also those who nearby. Therefore, smoking should be baned in public places. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
313 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
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