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One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? v.4

One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? v. 4
Traffic congestion has been an issue since the invention of automobiles. It can be seen in almost every big city and affects millions of people around the world. The results of this are stress, time loss and damage to the environment. Several factors are at the root of the traffic problem. The primary reason for this is that more and more people are driving nowadays. To my knowledge, recent studies published in ' ' Za rulem' ' Russian magazine in June 2018 manifestly illustrated that the amount of private cars in Moscow has doubled since 1995. Another reason is the city development. Main roads in Moscow were built during the Soviet era and as a result, they are not enough effective for modern rush hours which can usually be spotted in the mornings and evenings. The last factor is relatively low prices of petroleum. It has been claimed that due to the constant growth of the world population and its wealth if gasoline prices do not rise, soon there will be literally no free of cars zones around the globe. Just as there is no single factor behind the problem of congestion, there is no single solution. I firmly believe that the solution begins with the implementation of laws which help to lower the number of cars in active use. In Moscow, for instance, rules which were imposed in 2013 and introduced payable parkings, helped to reduce traffic of private autos by 50 per cent in the city centre. In addition, the city government should build more road junctions and new roads which divide the streams of vehicles. The third way is to increase taxes on fuels. It appears that there is a strong correlation between a number of automobiles on the road and prices of petrol. In my experience, when I visited the Ukraine, where fuel prices have risen significantly since the crisis of 2014, I saw that the roads are primarily empty, especially in comparison with Russian big cities. Having said that, traffic congestion has no easy solution but I do believe that it is not the one that can not be overcome. Implementation of the laws with restrictions is where the process begins. If we do one day solve the problem of traffic, then there is no doubt that big cities like Moscow will be places where not only want people to work, but also where they want to raise their children.
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Traffic
congestion has been an issue since the invention of automobiles. It can be
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seen
in almost every
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big
city and affects millions of
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people
around the world. The results of this are
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stress
, time loss and damage to the environment.

Several factors are at the root of the
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traffic
problem. The primary reason for this is that more and more
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people
are driving nowadays. To my knowledge, recent studies published in ' '
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Za
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#039; ' Russian magazine in June 2018
manifestly
illustrated that the amount of private cars in Moscow has doubled since 1995. Another reason is the city development. Main
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roads
in Moscow
were built
during the Soviet era and
as a result
, they are not
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enough
effective for modern rush hours which can
usually
be spotted
in the mornings and evenings. The last factor is
relatively
low
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prices
of petroleum. It has
been claimed
that due to the constant growth of the world population and its wealth if gasoline
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prices
do not rise,
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soon
there will be
literally
no free of cars zones around the globe.

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Just
as there is no single factor behind the problem of congestion, there is no single solution. I
firmly
believe that the solution
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begins
with the implementation of laws which
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help
to lower the number of cars in active
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use
. In Moscow,
for instance
,
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rules
which
were imposed
in 2013 and introduced payable
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parkings
,
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helped
to
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reduce
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traffic
of private autos by 50 per cent in the city
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centre
.
In addition
, the city
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government
should build more
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road
junctions and new
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roads
which divide the streams of vehicles. The third way is to increase taxes on fuels. It appears that there is a strong correlation between a number of automobiles on the
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road
and
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prices
of petrol. In my experience, when I visited the Ukraine, where fuel
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prices
have risen
significantly
since the crisis of 2014, I
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saw
that the
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roads
are
primarily
empty,
especially
in comparison
with Russian
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big
cities.

Having said that,
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traffic
congestion has no easy solution
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but
I do believe that it is not the one that can not
be overcome
. Implementation of the laws with restrictions is where the process
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begins
. If we do one day solve the problem of
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traffic
, then there is no doubt that
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big
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cities
like Moscow will be places where not
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only
want
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people
to work,
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but
also
where they want to raise their children.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
405 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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