The speakers discuss two possible solutions to the woman’s problem. Briefly summarize the problem. Then state which should solution you recommend and explain why. v.9
The speakers discuss two possible solutions to the woman’s problem. Briefly summarize the problem. Then state which should solution you recommend and explain why. v. 9
Whereas some argue that raising children in our modern society is harder than in old times, others claim that it is much simpler because of new inventions. In my opinion, while in the past children were not so exposed to strangers as today, raising a child nowadays is easier due to innovations in health care.
First of all, innovations in health care have helped people to have proper medical care for their children. Thus, it is cheaper than ever to take care of an infant on his or her early stage of life. For example, vaccination costs dropped consistently due to recent innovations on medical methods and equipment. Consequently, child mortality has declined significantly over the past decades, especially in developing countries.
On the other hand, new technologies have made easier for children to access internet. Hence, increasing the danger of exposing them to strangers. On top of that, children are easily fooled by strangers and parents are not always monitoring their access to internet as they should. For instance, a stranger can convince a child to meet him or her willing to do to the child some harm. Therefore, restricting children access to internet can mitigate this risk but will not solve the problem completely.
In conclusion, while improvements in the health care system have made the task of raising a child easier, internet access presents a risk at the moment children can get in contact with strangers. Then, in my opinion the innovations in medical care systems outweigh the risk of exposing the children on internet.
Whereas
some
argue that raising
children
in our modern society is harder than in
old
times, others claim that it is much simpler
because
of new inventions. In my opinion, while in the past
children
were not
so
exposed to
strangers
as
today
, raising a
child
nowadays is easier due to
innovations
in health care.
First of all
,
innovations
in health
care
have
helped
people
to have proper medical
care
for their
children
.
Thus
, it is cheaper than ever to take
care
of an infant on
his or her
early stage of life.
For example
, vaccination costs dropped
consistently
due to recent
innovations
on medical methods and equipment.
Consequently
,
child
mortality has declined
significantly
over the past decades,
especially
in
developing countries
.
On the other hand
, new technologies have made easier for
children
to
access
internet.
Hence
, increasing the
danger
of exposing them to
strangers
.
On top of that
,
children
are
easily
fooled by
strangers
and parents are not always monitoring their
access
to internet as they should.
For instance
, a
stranger
can convince a
child
to
meet
him or her willing to do to the
child
some
harm.
Therefore
, restricting
children
access
to internet can mitigate this
risk
but
will not solve the problem completely.
In conclusion
, while improvements in the health
care
system have made the task of raising a
child
easier, internet
access
presents a
risk
at the moment
children
can
get
in contact with
strangers
. Then, in my opinion the
innovations
in medical
care
systems outweigh the
risk
of exposing the
children
on internet.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes