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TPO 03 - Question 3Hot Breakfasts EliminatedBeginning next month, Dining Services will no longer serve hot breakfast foods at university dining halls. Instead, students will be offered a wide assortment of cold breakfast items in the morning. These cold b v.1

TPO 03 - Question 3Hot Breakfasts EliminatedBeginning next month, Dining Services will no longer serve hot breakfast foods at university dining halls. Instead, students will be offered a wide assortment of cold breakfast items in the morning. These cold b v. 1
It is a common idea that visiting some countries is the only way to get knowledge about the other places and cultures. While nowadays, given that the Internet and TV resources rapidly evolved, most people share an idea that all knowledge obtained while travelling can be obtained from online and broadcast programs as well. Although, both ideas have its solid and weak arguments. On the one hand, nothing compares to the travelling. Obviously, when you discover some new place while you are really there, you can see, hear, smell and taste it. Therefore, you gain totally new feelings and impressions which you would never get from the web pages or TV screens. For example, take Paris, you can know everything about the Paris and Eiffel Tower, but you hardly can see the overpopulated by tourist city centre, or the long queues to enter the Eiffel Tower, followed with big noise and high prices. Definitely, walking around some place has its own advantages over just listening or watching about it. On the other hand, today we have a variety of TV-shows, blogs, web services and channels about travelling, which provides us with sufficient information about all the aspects of life, culture, language and detailed description about the any interested area. For instance, there are thousands of YouTube videos about anything in the world. Consequently, you can learn from such videos almost everything, including language dialects, food, clothes, prices, tickets and even find a friend from there to talk. In my opinion, both viewpoints have its followers according to their conditions. Undoubtedly, if you can travel it is the best choice. However, while sitting at home or at work anyone still able to learn a lot about other countries worldwide. In conclusion, we can see that it is hard to say that travelling is better to learn about the foreign places, or watching the National Geographic channel and browsing websites is alternative to travel. Accordingly, we can state that two points of view actually supplement each other, and can be used as support to each other.
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idea
that visiting
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some
countries is the
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only
way to
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get
knowledge about the
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other
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places
and cultures. While nowadays,
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given
that the Internet and TV resources
rapidly
evolved, most
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people
share an
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
that all knowledge obtained while
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travelling
can
be obtained
from online and broadcast programs
as well
. Although, both
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ideas
have its solid and weak arguments.

On the one hand, nothing compares to the
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travelling
.
Obviously
, when you discover
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
new
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place
while you are
really
there, you can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
, hear, smell and taste it.
Therefore
, you gain
totally
new feelings and impressions which you would never
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
from the web pages or TV screens.
For example
, take Paris, you can know everything about the Paris and Eiffel Tower,
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but
you hardly can
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see
the overpopulated by tourist city
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centre
, or the long queues to enter the Eiffel Tower, followed with
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big
noise and high prices. Definitely, walking around
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some
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place
has its
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own
advantages over
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just
listening or watching about it.

On the
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other
hand,
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today
we have a variety of TV-
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
, blogs, web services and channels about
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
travelling
, which provides us with sufficient information about all the aspects of life, culture, language and detailed description about the any interested area.
For instance
, there are thousands of YouTube videos about anything in the world.
Consequently
, you can learn from such videos almost everything, including language dialects, food, clothes, prices, tickets and even find a friend from there to talk.

In my opinion, both viewpoints have its followers according to their conditions.
Undoubtedly
, if you can travel it is the best choice.
However
, while sitting at home or at work anyone
still
able to learn a lot about
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
countries worldwide.

In conclusion
, we can
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see
that it is
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hard
to say that
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travelling
is better to learn about the foreign
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
places
, or watching the National Geographic channel and browsing websites is alternative to travel.
Accordingly
, we can state that two points of view actually supplement each
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other
, and can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
as support to each
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other
.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay TPO 03 - Question 3Hot Breakfasts EliminatedBeginning next month, Dining Services will no longer serve hot breakfast foods at university dining halls. Instead, students will be offered a wide assortment of cold breakfast items in the morning. These cold b v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
344 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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