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The objective of this course is to write affective college essays that integrate assigned readings, class discussions, and the writer's knoeledge and experience. Students will produce a total of six essays. Each week, students will have two hours v.1

The objective of this course is to write affective college essays that integrate assigned readings, class discussions, and the writer's knoeledge and experience. Students will produce a total of six essays. Each week, students will have two hours v. 1
In modern times, it is no longer difficult to find numerous students who study from abroad, and some thinkers believe that learning their courses from another country has seldom positive effects on pupils. However, I personally contend that studying from overseas have a lot of merits than its negatives. On the one hand, it is partly true that an increasing number of students may make a certain of the knowledge gap among students and escalate the gap between poor and rich. Firstly, the students studying in domestic are highly likely to feel the a sense of relative deprivation, as they do not have financial afford to travel to another nation, even he or she has more desire of learning their majors from aborad. Furthermore, it leads to the severe gap of the knowledge on account of they cannot be educated by renowned professors and colleges which are located in another country. Nevertheless, I am firmly of the opinion that its advantages prevail over its dis-incentives. In the first place, it is needless to say that pupils can profoundly learn their education from prestigious colleges, while fostering their spirit of independence by separating from their parents. In addition, they can obtain wider horizons and diverse perspectives which can mingle with a variety of races while they study. Another point worth mentioning is that it cannot help saying with respect to the opportunities of jobs. Nowadays, the reasons for which a lot of students leave their motherland and study in another country are explicit to be hired by well-known multinational corporations. According to the Oxford survey, many enterprises want to the applicants who have studied from overseas rather than those studying domestic nation. In conclusion, it is still debatable whether or not, studying in domestic country has rarely incentives. However, I am firmly convinced that when we look at the overall picture, it seems to me that the benefits of going to study from the international country are overwhelmingly more significant than those drawbacks.
In modern times, it is no longer difficult to find numerous
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students
who
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study
from abroad, and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
thinkers believe that learning their courses from another
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country
has seldom
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
effects on pupils.
However
, I
personally
contend that
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studying
from overseas have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
merits than its negatives.

On the one hand, it is partly true that an increasing number of
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students
may
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a certain of the knowledge gap among
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
and escalate the gap between poor and rich.
Firstly
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
studying
in domestic are
highly
likely to feel
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the a
sense of relative deprivation, as they do not have financial afford to travel to another nation, even he or she has more desire of learning their majors from
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aborad
.
Furthermore
, it leads to the severe gap of the knowledge on account of they cannot
be educated
by renowned professors and colleges which
are located
in another country.

Nevertheless
, I am
firmly
of the opinion that its advantages prevail over its dis-incentives. In the
first
place, it is needless to say that pupils can
profoundly
learn their education from prestigious colleges, while fostering their spirit of independence by separating from their parents.
In addition
, they can obtain wider horizons and diverse perspectives which can mingle with a variety of races while they
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
study
. Another point worth mentioning is that it cannot
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
saying with respect to the opportunities of jobs. Nowadays, the reasons for which
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
their motherland and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
study
in another
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
are explicit to
be hired
by well-known multinational corporations. According to the Oxford survey,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
enterprises want to the applicants who have studied from overseas
rather
than those
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
studying
domestic nation.

In conclusion
, it is
still
debatable
Consider shortening this phrase to just "whether". It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
whether or not
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
studying
in domestic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
has rarely incentives.
However
, I am
firmly
convinced that when we look at the
overall
picture, it seems to me that the benefits of going to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
study
from the international
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
are
overwhelmingly
more significant than those drawbacks.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay The objective of this course is to write affective college essays that integrate assigned readings, class discussions, and the writer's knoeledge and experience. Students will produce a total of six essays. Each week, students will have two hours v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
332 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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