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What is the best class you have taken in school? Why was it the best in your opinion? Include details and examples in you explanation. v.1

What is the best class you have taken in school? Why was it the best in your opinion? Include details and examples in you explanation. v. 1
In our present world today, there are various activities, children partake in which includes educational, physical sporting, virtual sporting activities such as gaming and many others that has been observed to contribute some certain degree of changes to their behavioural pattern. In the opinion of some guardians, it is believed that the level of violence portrayed in some gaming, media related devices and entertainment has increased which has risen their level of concerns. There are certain observable behavioural consequences peculiar to kids engaging these violent activities viewed on televisions and other form of media entertainment. Some of the few are stronger desire for violence and blood related activities, encouraging bullying among children who look a lot bigger and stronger among their peers and much more. Many schools and house of worship have in various forms waged war against violence through preaching, music and educating many about the significance of staying off and the only thing they can be to keep doing more. In addition, the government enacting laws against social-vices is also not an exception. In many governments, there are juvenile prison for capital offences or even a lot less that could help restructure the mental unhealthiness for child offenders are being built regularly. There are lots of sensitizations to dissuade wards and orient some early offenders about the consequences of the actions of these magnitudes by NGO (Non-governmental Organization). Parents are also one of the principal contributors to what a child make out of life. Abusive parents are more likely to have abused children, so, the position of parents cannot be over emphasized. It is imperative that parents are constantly advising their wards and encourage them through their own attitudes to stay off these red zones. I believe the level of information on violence should be controlled and censored to some degree. Music, videos and games publicizing violence should have some level of censorship where these things are checked before being pushed into the market for potential customers. I believe such regulations have not been implemented yet or not functioning effectively, which I believe the government and the necessary agencies should look into in order to reduce the level anxiety among these parents since technology is here to stay. In conclusion, modernization comes with a price and this is one we have to pay. But I will further advise that legislative laws against violent contents can really go a long way to improve the sanity of our progeny as long as we keep fighting to maintain a proper mental health within the society.
In our present world
today
, there are various
activities
, children partake in which includes educational, physical sporting, virtual sporting
activities
such as gaming and
many
others that has
been observed
to contribute
some
certain degree of
changes
to their
behavioural
pattern. In the opinion of
some
guardians, it
is believed
that the
level
of
violence
portrayed in
some
gaming, media related devices and entertainment has increased which has risen their
level
of concerns.

There are certain observable
behavioural
consequences peculiar to kids engaging these violent
activities
viewed on televisions and other form of media entertainment.
Some of the
few are stronger desire for
violence
and blood related
activities
, encouraging bullying among children who look a lot bigger and stronger among their peers and much more.

Many
schools and
house
of worship have in various forms waged war against
violence
through preaching, music and educating
many
about the significance of staying off and the
only
thing they can be to
keep
doing more.
In addition
, the
government
enacting laws against social-vices is
also
not an exception. In
many
governments
, there are juvenile prison for capital
offences
or even a lot less that could
help
restructure the mental unhealthiness for child offenders are
being built
regularly
. There are lots of
sensitizations
to dissuade wards and orient
some
early offenders about the consequences of the actions of these magnitudes by NGO (Non-governmental Organization).
Parents
are
also
one of the principal contributors to what a child
make
out of life. Abusive
parents
are more likely to have abused children,
so
, the position of
parents
cannot be over emphasized. It is imperative that
parents
are
constantly
advising their wards and encourage them through their
own
attitudes to stay off these red zones. I believe the
level
of information on
violence
should
be controlled
and censored to
some
degree. Music, videos and games publicizing
violence
should have
some
level
of censorship where these things are
checked
before
being pushed
into the market for potential customers. I believe such regulations have not
been implemented
yet
or not functioning
effectively
, which I believe the
government
and the necessary agencies should look into in order to
reduce
the
level
anxiety among these
parents
since technology is here to stay.

In conclusion
, modernization
comes
with a price and this is one we
have to
pay.
But
I will
further
advise that legislative laws against violent contents can
really
go a long way to
improve
the sanity of our progeny as long as we
keep
fighting to maintain a proper mental health within the society.
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IELTS essay What is the best class you have taken in school? Why was it the best in your opinion? Include details and examples in you explanation. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
424 words
7
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