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The society would benefit from a ban on all forms of advertisements because it serves no useful purpose, and can even be damaging. Advantages and disadvantages v.1

The society would benefit from a ban on all forms of advertisements because it serves no useful purpose, and can even be damaging. Advantages and disadvantages v. 1
Life presents human with options every day, every time. While the general presumption is that the present age provides an array of choices; in fact, this depends on the situation and one's perspective of seeing things. The options are often limited too, based on one's affordability. To begin with, everyday situations vary for all, and people have their own ways to handle it. For this reason, they may have options that are more or less compared to others depending on the place or circumstance. For instance, a person living in the city has more choices in terms of travel, such as taking the bus, renting a taxi or riding an owned vehicle. Comparatively, someone living in a remote area can be left with fewer options, like travelling by rail or cab. Furthermore, the way people perceive things is also a deciding factor in the number of choices they have. As an illustration, in India it is believed that wasting food is equivalent to humiliating the farmer who works hard to grow crops. On a contrary, in middle-eastern nations, like Saudi Arabia, eating until the plates are empty is considered offensive. Clearly, this shows that views or choices change based on perception. Additionally, it is not always true that a person will have multiple choices in every case; often dependent on the status and money of a person. For example, the rich section of the society living in cities: have a huge number of places to visit, have various foods to eat, and have many careers to choose from. Contrastingly, the poor only have little or no options for all these as they cannot afford as much as the rich. In conclusion, according to a few modern day provides us with many preferences; although, this depends on factors such as, the overall conditions and the viewpoint in which the situation is gauged, and usually affordability.
Life presents human with
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options
every day, every time. While the general presumption is that the present age provides an array of
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choices
; in fact, this depends on the situation and one's perspective of seeing things. The
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options
are
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often
limited too, based on one's affordability.

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begin
with, everyday situations vary for all, and
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people
have their
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own
ways to handle it.
For this reason
, they may have
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options
that are more or less compared to others depending on the place or circumstance.
For instance
, a person living in the city has more
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choices
in terms of travel, such as taking the bus, renting a taxi or riding an
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owned
vehicle.
Comparatively
, someone living in a remote area can be
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left
with fewer
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options
, like travelling by rail or cab.

Furthermore
, the way
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people
perceive things is
also
a deciding factor in the number of
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choices
they have. As an illustration, in India it
is believed
that wasting food is equivalent to humiliating the farmer who works
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hard
to grow crops. On a contrary, in middle-eastern nations, like Saudi Arabia, eating until the plates are empty
is considered
offensive.
Clearly
, this
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shows
that views or
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choices
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change
based on perception.

Additionally
, it is not always true that a person will have multiple
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choices
in every case;
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often
dependent on the status and money of a person.
For example
, the rich section of the society living in cities: have a huge number of places to visit, have various foods to eat, and have
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many
careers to choose from.
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Contrastingly
, the poor
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only
have
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little
or no
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options
for all these as they cannot afford as much as the rich.

In conclusion
, according to a few modern day provides us with
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many
preferences; although, this depends on factors such as, the
overall
conditions and the viewpoint in which the situation
is gauged
, and
usually
affordability.
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IELTS essay The society would benefit from a ban on all forms of advertisements because it serves no useful purpose, and can even be damaging. Advantages and disadvantages v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
314 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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