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Some people think that it is good for a country’s culture to broadcastforeign films and TV shows. Others, however, think it is best to producelocal films and shows. Discuss both views and give your own opinion v.1

Some people think that it is good for a country’s culture to broadcastforeign films and TV shows. Others, however, think it is best to producelocal films and shows. 1
There is a growing regrettable trend when it comes to people gorging imbalanced dietary food along with their non-existent physical activities. In this essay we shall see the cause and consequences about why it happens to the present generation and how we can overcome this challenge. Two or three decades ago, there were not as much as varieties of food as we see today. Definitely, the food expenses have become a deciding factor in one’s family budget. Thanks to the benefits of globalisation wherein the different tastes and culinary have been remodelled and sent beyond a country’s territorial border. Ideally a balanced diet should contain a higher portion of various vitamins, proteins and less of carbohydrates. However, the food that is available now at all the retail chains are filled with more unsaturated fats and carbohydrates. For example a slice of cheese busted pizza consumed along with a can of coke will convert the food into an unsaturated fat, which would take 2-3 days for our digestive system to burn and convert them into calories. Unsurprisingly, our digestive system is not a super machine, as these unsaturated fats are accumulated and converted into sucrose. This in turn will gradually affect liver and kidneys. Further, this fat is stored everywhere in our body, making one as obese, thereby impeding his physical activities. This can be addressed only if we have a solid determination in following a smarter dietary practices. This begins by consuming only the home cooked food rather munching from the fast food outlets. Interestingly, once we cross the age of 30, the cells in our body begin to decay making one to grow old. In order to resist the early ageing one should wake up from the whirlwind of a sedentary life. This can achieved by doing as much as physical exercises. Only exercises can burn the unsaturated fats deposited in our body and rid our body from all the unnecessary toxins. This message can reach the youths by sending fitness videos in social media, which would be viewed by several people. This would give them an impetus to abandon their laziness and move towards fitness. It is safe to conclude that the only way to put away ageing and various health hazards is to adhere to healthy eating and by following physical activities. These practices would develop a healthy workforce wherein they work stress and disease free. If the workforce is healthy, the enterprises followed by the state and the country would reap benefits monetarily.
There is a growing regrettable trend when it
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comes
to
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people
gorging imbalanced dietary
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food
along with their non-existent
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physical
activities. In this essay we shall
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see
the cause and
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consequences about
why it happens to the present generation and how we can overcome this challenge.

Two or three decades ago, there were not as much as varieties of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
as we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
. Definitely, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
expenses have become a deciding factor in one’s family budget. Thanks to the benefits of
Possible spelling mistake. 'globalisation' is British English.
globalisation
wherein the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
tastes and culinary have been
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remodelled
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sent
beyond a country’s territorial border.
Ideally
a balanced diet should contain a higher portion of various vitamins, proteins and less of carbohydrates.
However
, the
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food
that is
available
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
at all the retail chains
are filled
with more unsaturated
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fats
and carbohydrates.
For example
a slice of cheese busted pizza consumed along with a can of coke will convert the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
into an unsaturated
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fat
, which would take 2-3 days for our digestive system to burn and convert them into calories.
Unsurprisingly
, our digestive system is not a super machine, as these unsaturated
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fats
are accumulated
and converted into sucrose. This in turn will
gradually
affect liver and kidneys.
Further
, this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fat
is stored
everywhere in our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
body
, making one as obese, thereby impeding his
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
physical
activities.

This can
be addressed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
only
if we have a solid determination in following a smarter dietary practices. This
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begins
by consuming
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only
the home cooked
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food
rather
munching from the
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fast
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food
outlets.
Interestingly
, once we cross the age of 30, the cells in our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
body
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
to decay making one to grow
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
. In order to resist the early
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ageing
one should wake up from the whirlwind of a sedentary life. This can achieved by doing as much as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
physical
exercises.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Only
exercises can burn the unsaturated
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fats
deposited in our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
body
and rid our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
body
from all the unnecessary toxins. This message can reach the youths by sending fitness videos in social media, which would
be viewed
by several
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
. This would give them an impetus to abandon their laziness and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
towards fitness.

It is safe
to conclude
that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
only
way to put away
Possible spelling mistake. 'ageing' is British English.
ageing
and various health hazards is to adhere to healthy eating and by following
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
physical
activities. These practices would develop a healthy workforce wherein they work
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
and disease free. If the workforce is healthy, the enterprises followed by the state and the country would reap benefits
monetarily
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
He who knows no foreign languages know nothing of his own.
Johann Wolfgang von Goethe

IELTS essay Some people think that it is good for a country’s culture to broadcastforeign films and TV shows. Others, however, think it is best to producelocal films and shows. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
417 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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