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Some people think that it is good for a country’s culture to broadcastforeign films and TV shows. Others, however, think it is best to producelocal films and shows. 1
There is a growing regrettable trend when it comes to people gorging imbalanced dietary food along with their non-existent physical activities. In this essay we shall see the cause and consequences about why it happens to the present generation and how we can overcome this challenge. Two or three decades ago, there were not as much as varieties of food as we see today. Definitely, the food expenses have become a deciding factor in one’s family budget. Thanks to the benefits of globalisation wherein the different tastes and culinary have been remodelled and sent beyond a country’s territorial border. Ideally a balanced diet should contain a higher portion of various vitamins, proteins and less of carbohydrates. However, the food that is available now at all the retail chains are filled with more unsaturated fats and carbohydrates. For example a slice of cheese busted pizza consumed along with a can of coke will convert the food into an unsaturated fat, which would take 2-3 days for our digestive system to burn and convert them into calories. Unsurprisingly, our digestive system is not a super machine, as these unsaturated fats are accumulated and converted into sucrose. This in turn will gradually affect liver and kidneys. Further, this fat is stored everywhere in our body, making one as obese, thereby impeding his physical activities. This can be addressed only if we have a solid determination in following a smarter dietary practices. This begins by consuming only the home cooked food rather munching from the fast food outlets. Interestingly, once we cross the age of 30, the cells in our body begin to decay making one to grow old. In order to resist the early ageing one should wake up from the whirlwind of a sedentary life. This can achieved by doing as much as physical exercises. Only exercises can burn the unsaturated fats deposited in our body and rid our body from all the unnecessary toxins. This message can reach the youths by sending fitness videos in social media, which would be viewed by several people. This would give them an impetus to abandon their laziness and move towards fitness. It is safe to conclude that the only way to put away ageing and various health hazards is to adhere to healthy eating and by following physical activities. These practices would develop a healthy workforce wherein they work stress and disease free. If the workforce is healthy, the enterprises followed by the state and the country would reap benefits monetarily.
There is a growing regrettable trend when it
comes
to
people
gorging imbalanced dietary
food
along with their non-existent
physical
activities. In this essay we shall
see
the cause and
consequences about
why it happens to the present generation and how we can overcome this challenge.

Two or three decades ago, there were not as much as varieties of
food
as we
see
today
. Definitely, the
food
expenses have become a deciding factor in one’s family budget. Thanks to the benefits of
globalisation
wherein the
different
tastes and culinary have been
remodelled
and
sent
beyond a country’s territorial border.
Ideally
a balanced diet should contain a higher portion of various vitamins, proteins and less of carbohydrates.
However
, the
food
that is
available
now
at all the retail chains
are filled
with more unsaturated
fats
and carbohydrates.
For example
a slice of cheese busted pizza consumed along with a can of coke will convert the
food
into an unsaturated
fat
, which would take 2-3 days for our digestive system to burn and convert them into calories.
Unsurprisingly
, our digestive system is not a super machine, as these unsaturated
fats
are accumulated
and converted into sucrose. This in turn will
gradually
affect liver and kidneys.
Further
, this
fat
is stored
everywhere in our
body
, making one as obese, thereby impeding his
physical
activities.

This can
be addressed
only
if we have a solid determination in following a smarter dietary practices. This
begins
by consuming
only
the home cooked
food
rather
munching from the
fast
food
outlets.
Interestingly
, once we cross the age of 30, the cells in our
body
begin
to decay making one to grow
old
. In order to resist the early
ageing
one should wake up from the whirlwind of a sedentary life. This can achieved by doing as much as
physical
exercises.
Only
exercises can burn the unsaturated
fats
deposited in our
body
and rid our
body
from all the unnecessary toxins. This message can reach the youths by sending fitness videos in social media, which would
be viewed
by several
people
. This would give them an impetus to abandon their laziness and
move
towards fitness.

It is safe
to conclude
that the
only
way to put away
ageing
and various health hazards is to adhere to healthy eating and by following
physical
activities. These practices would develop a healthy workforce wherein they work
stress
and disease free. If the workforce is healthy, the enterprises followed by the state and the country would reap benefits
monetarily
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that it is good for a country’s culture to broadcastforeign films and TV shows. Others, however, think it is best to producelocal films and shows. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
417 words
7
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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